The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Realty business is a competitive market on its own. The homeowner feels a little more inclined to the Adams Realty as he is stating the firm to be a clear winner among the two. And this notion can be observed throughout his statements regarding the firm.
Firstly, the comparison of the two firms on the basis of agents is not justifiable. One of the important skills for an agent is to make as many contacts as possible to increase his reach to the customers. The lesser number does not always imply lesser reach to customers. Though Fitch may have lesser number of agents, they would have a greater reach through some other means like electronic media, etc.
Next, the revenue comparison may look a balanced factor for the comparison of the firms. But the profitability is the crucial factor to sustain. And as far as customer’s point of view is concerned, reliability along with affordable prices is a great combination for customer satisfaction. Higher sales of Adams may be due to the trading of more expensive properties than the Fitch. On the other hand, Fitch may have created a better customer base through their deals even though the deals may not be of higher valuation.
Finally, the homeowner shares his own experience of listing of his own property. The timeline mentioned during the two transactions is indeed not supporting. During his first deal, the market conditions would have been not favourable for the trading and hence, it took a longer period for the transaction. The first deal made was a decade ago whereas the second one was merely a year ago. There is a very high possibility of drastic changes in the market during this time period. Therefore, such comparison seems a bit biased.
Concluding the argument, it would have been better if the house owner had presented better facts and figures from a reliable source to support his stand. Presenting such statements, without concrete evidence, makes his stand on a weaker side.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 403, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... other means like electronic media, etc. Next, the revenue comparison may look a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 13.6137724551 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 333.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9009009009 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7231889579 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567567567568 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8327199604 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.6 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.65 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120428635511 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349193536645 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547299026969 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.069178262295 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689710265241 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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