The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
I would like to contend that the memo from the direction of student housing at Buckingham College needs more clarification to the evidences he stated. Its request to build new dormitories are based on assumptions that are too vague. Buckingham college need to consider these assumptions before agreeing to the director of student housing.
First of all, it is assumed that by the increase in enrollment at Buckingham's also gives rise to the increase in the housing needs. Is it stated that the enrolled students are native or foreign? It could be that the students getting enrolled are all native to the Buckingham's town. So, there won't be any particular rise in demand for the dormitories. It also states that based on current trends, the enrollment has risen. This trend could be only of their native city. So, if it's the trend of their native town then the increase in housing needs are not going to increase by a substantiate amount as stated by the director of student housing.
Again, it is assumed that the after 50 years the enrollment of buckingham's will be doubled. Thus, the housing needs. This is according to the current trends and trends always change every few years. So, there is no guarantee that the demand of students to enroll in Buckingham College would be same. As, you can't predict when the trend will change. It could be possible that this is the only native college in the town, so the local town students enroll in this college for the ease of covenience. For the contrary lets assume for while that the demand of students to enroll in Buckingham College doubles in the next 50 years. Is it stated that there will a demand in more foreign or inter-state students will increase? And the demand is going to be doubled in 50 years; its a long way to go, Why proposing to build new dormitories so early?
It is stated that there is an increase in the average rent of the town and students won't be able to afford off-campus houses. Is it stated that people coming from inter-state or foreign are very poor? And is it given that the College would provide them dormitories at a price lesser than they get a house off-campus? The income or background of the students isn't known, so we can't assume that they would be in search of cheaper appartments; Thereby, building new dormitories.
Lastly, it is assumed that the students would be attracted to enroll in the college by seeing their new dormitories. Generally, a majority of students would be lured by the faculty and infrastructure of the college rather than the dormitoes. It is not stated that the students would get attracted to the dormitoes but what if the prices are higher than the average rent in the town. The students will not opt for on-campus dormitoes, where he can find a place at a cheaper price.
I would like to conclude by saying the director of student housing have made many unstated assumptions and the board or commity of Buckingham's College should make a decision keeping in mind the above stated assumptions.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'lastly', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'while', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229020979021 0.25644967241 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.174825174825 0.15541462614 112% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0699300699301 0.0836205057962 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0384615384615 0.0520304965353 74% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0472027972028 0.0272364105082 173% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.13986013986 0.125424944231 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0506993006993 0.0416121511921 122% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62458133953 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0314685314685 0.026700313972 118% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.117132867133 0.113004496875 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0314685314685 0.0255425247493 123% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00874125874126 0.0127820249294 68% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3017.0 2731.13054187 110% => OK
No of words: 527.0 446.07635468 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72485768501 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.57801047555 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.339658444023 0.378187486979 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.239089184061 0.287650121315 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.153700189753 0.208842608468 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0853889943074 0.135150697306 63% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62458133953 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 207.018472906 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396584440228 0.469332199767 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.530361587 52.1807786196 87% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.039408867 140% => OK
Sentence length: 18.8214285714 23.2022227129 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8623229364 57.7814097925 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.75 141.986410481 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8214285714 23.2022227129 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.357142857143 0.724660767414 49% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 42.7303469775 51.9672348444 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.61073825503 1.8405768891 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.496978298986 0.441005458295 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122107047971 0.135418324435 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.107679488145 0.0829849096947 130% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.554551138636 0.58762219726 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.177310453458 0.147661913831 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.201626674221 0.193483328276 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103353845155 0.0970749176394 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.477131778612 0.42659136922 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.104652731635 0.0774707102158 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.354246423869 0.312017818177 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066901881019 0.0698173142475 96% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.82512315271 249% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.82389162562 283% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 14.657635468 157% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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