The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country.
"The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangerous potholes. In another part of the state, a section of Route 40, paved by Appian Roadways more than four years ago, is still in good condition. In a demonstration of their continuing commitment to quality, Appian Roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality-control manager. Therefore, I recommend hiring Appian Roadways to construct the access roads for all our new shopping malls. I predict that our Appian access roads will not have to be repaired for at least four years."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The aouthor predicts that if access road to the mall is built by Appian roadways , they will not need to be repaired for atleast 4 years. In support of this claim he cites the example pf another aprt of the road constructed by Appian which is still in good condition.He also gives exaample of anopther company that made roads which is in poor condition within two years. The aouthor also believes that new quality control manager at Appian and ist state of the art machine are more reasons to believe the prediction. These areguments do not make a cogent case , though they may sound resonable at first.
Firstly , the author compares roads made by Appian and another company which are in different parts of the country. The author does not eluciadte the usage and the average traffic on both the roads . He also does not mention the climate of areas aorund the two roads. Is it that Route 101 experinces heavy rainfall ? Is it true that the average traffic is same on both the routes? Heavy goods vehicle may be more prevalent on Route 101 leading to greater wear and tear. Potholes can also be attributed to heavy rainfall and other natural causes. Without sufficient answers to the above we cannot make a meaningful comarison on the impervious or resistance level of the raods made by the two companies.
Secondly , auothor brings our attention to the fact that Appian Co. has purchased new state of the art paving machine and hired a new quality control manager. He does not imply anywhere that this exclusive machine will be used to construct access roads. Access roads are generally smaller so it a question where they do need such state of the art machine ? Or it is justa gimmick by Appian to attract more customers ? Appian as a company could be looking to expand in other areas and take up contracts to build roads in different terrain. Thus they hired a new manager . The impact recruitment will impact access roads for the mall are not mentioned
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...ess roads for the mall are not mentioned
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 343.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72594752187 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39842729979 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513119533528 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4711509115 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3157894737 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0526315789 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94736842105 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.075669633454 0.218282227539 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0256315790386 0.0743258471296 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278426581705 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0540276921621 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266330343135 0.0628817314937 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.3799401198 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.5979740519 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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