The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of Movies Galore, a chain of video rental stores.
“In order to reverse the recent decline in our profits, we must reduce operating expenses at Movies Galore’s ten video rental stores. Since we are famous for our special bargains, raising our rental prices is not a viable way to improve profits. Last month our store in downtown Marston significantly decreased its operating expenses by closing at 6:00 P.M. rather than 9:00 P.M. and by reducing its stock by eliminating all movies released more than five years ago. Therefore, in order to increase profits without jeopardizing our reputation for offering great movies at low prices, we recommend implementing similar changes in our other nine Movies Galore stores.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be addressed in order to decide whether implementing the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result and explain how the answers to those questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author has stated that reducing the operating expenses would reverse the decline in the profits recently. Although it seems to be positive idea, it is not completely agreeable. Operating time is asynchronous with his intention of increasing the profits. Since profit is all about how much is the gain in return to the number of stocks sold but not about the time for which the sale is open. Also, supporting to my previous statement he has not mentioned the quantity of stocks sold before and after cutting down the operating time in one of his store. Thus,leaving a room for lot of conclusions that can be debated upon as follows.
considering the fortuitous outcome of cutting down the operating time of one store in Martson, the author has decided to implement this to his nine other stores. Although his explanation about cutting down the operating time is quite convincing he has also stated that old stock was eliminated. Which brings into light that the owner has over-sighted the fact that the store held new stock alone at a low price which would be quite attractive to the customers thus promisingly improving the sales. Also considering the gains in one store cannot bring the same outcomes in other stores. Thus survey of people's interests in different geographic locations should be accounted before enforcing similar conclusion.
In his memo he has also mentioned that he aims to increase the profits without affecting the original prices of the stocks. This statement should be venerated since the author is scrupulous about the reputation the company holds which is good sign. But offering new movies for very old price wouldn't fetch prolific gains he is ambitious about. Despite of cutting down the sale time, I would suggest that, selling the old movies at a very cheaper rates and special discounts would attract customers in promising numbers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'so', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229850746269 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.182089552239 0.15541462614 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0835820895522 0.0836205057962 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0537313432836 0.0520304965353 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0417910447761 0.0272364105082 153% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.14328358209 0.125424944231 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0835820895522 0.0416121511921 201% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.61889376197 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0208955223881 0.026700313972 78% => OK
Particles: 0.0119402985075 0.001811407834 659% => OK
Determiners: 0.107462686567 0.113004496875 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0238805970149 0.0255425247493 93% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0149253731343 0.0127820249294 117% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1877.0 2731.13054187 69% => OK
No of words: 312.0 446.07635468 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01602564103 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.57801047555 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.349358974359 0.378187486979 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275641025641 0.287650121315 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.195512820513 0.208842608468 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144230769231 0.135150697306 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61889376197 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 207.018472906 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522435897436 0.469332199767 111% => OK
Word variations: 53.6203048672 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.039408867 75% => OK
Sentence length: 20.8 23.2022227129 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6773436195 57.7814097925 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.133333333 141.986410481 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 23.2022227129 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.333333333333 0.724660767414 46% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.14285714286 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 48.3641025641 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.64516129032 1.8405768891 89% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335302658874 0.441005458295 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.105782197814 0.135418324435 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0746636951595 0.0829849096947 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.5057085245 0.58762219726 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.154916974934 0.147661913831 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151223036771 0.193483328276 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882759157445 0.0970749176394 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.55406725415 0.42659136922 130% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0321390131809 0.0774707102158 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274739001041 0.312017818177 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180620142821 0.0698173142475 26% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.33743842365 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.87684729064 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 6.46551724138 170% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 5.36822660099 19% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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