The following appeared as part of an article in a magazine devoted to regional
life.
“Corporations should look to the city of Helios when seeking new business
opportunities or a new location. Even in the recent recession, Helios’s
unemployment rate was lower than the regional average. It is the industrial center
of the region, and historically it has provided more than its share of the region’s
manufacturing jobs. In addition, Helios is attempting to expand its economic base
by attracting companies that focus on research and development of innovative
technologies.”
Discuss how well reasoned... etc.
In this argument corporations are urged to consider the city of Helios when seeking a new location or new business opportunities. To
support this recommendation, the author points out that Helios is the industrial center of the region, providing most of the region’s
manufacturing jobs and enjoying a lower-than-average unemployment rate. Moreover, it is argued, efforts are currently underway to
expand the economic base of the city by attracting companies that focus on research and development of innovative technologies. This
argument is problematic for two reasons.
To begin with, it is questionable whether the available labor pool in Helios could support all types of corporations. Given that Helios has
attracted mainly industrial and manufacturing companies in the past, it is unlikely that the local pool of prospective employees would be
suitable for corporations of other types. For example, the needs of research and development companies would not be met by a labor
force trained in manufacturing skills. For this reason, it’s unlikely that Helios will be successful in its attempt to attract companies that
focus or research and development of innovative technologies.
Another problem with the available work force is its size. Due to the lower than average unemployment rate in Helios, corporations that
require large numbers of workers would not find Helios attractive. The fact that few persons are out of work suggests that new
corporations will have to either attract new workers to Helios or pay the existing workers higher wages in order to lure them away from
their current jobs. Neither of these alternatives seems enticing to companies seeking to relocate.
In conclusion, the author has not succeeded in providing compelling reasons for selecting Helios as the site for a company wishing to
relocate. In fact, the reasons offered function better as reasons for not relocating to Helios. Nor has the author provided compelling
reasons for companies seeking new business opportunities to choose Helios.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 16, column 56, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ct, the reasons offered function better as reasons for not relocating to Helios. N...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['moreover', 'so', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.273504273504 0.25644967241 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.168091168091 0.15541462614 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0911680911681 0.0836205057962 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.02849002849 0.0520304965353 55% => OK
Pronouns: 0.022792022792 0.0272364105082 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136752136752 0.125424944231 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0541310541311 0.0416121511921 130% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.16992793501 2.79052419416 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.039886039886 0.026700313972 149% => OK
Particles: 0.002849002849 0.001811407834 157% => OK
Determiners: 0.0911680911681 0.113004496875 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.017094017094 0.0255425247493 67% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00854700854701 0.0127820249294 67% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2051.0 2731.13054187 75% => OK
No of words: 317.0 446.07635468 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.47003154574 6.12365571057 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.57801047555 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.416403785489 0.378187486979 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.353312302839 0.287650121315 123% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.239747634069 0.208842608468 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.170347003155 0.135150697306 126% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16992793501 2.79052419416 114% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 207.018472906 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507886435331 0.469332199767 108% => OK
Word variations: 51.7782276955 52.1807786196 99% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.039408867 75% => OK
Sentence length: 21.1333333333 23.2022227129 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0280428956 57.7814097925 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.733333333 141.986410481 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 23.2022227129 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.724660767414 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 17.0 5.14285714286 331% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 56.4645636172 51.9672348444 109% => OK
Elegance: 2.11688311688 1.8405768891 115% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456486012829 0.441005458295 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.150375519535 0.135418324435 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0954761303065 0.0829849096947 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.692142060469 0.58762219726 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.275461359607 0.147661913831 187% => Sentences are changing often in a paragraphs.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200407536441 0.193483328276 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983148143926 0.0970749176394 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.118502765017 0.42659136922 28% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.125079954694 0.0774707102158 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183509612337 0.312017818177 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0997389696342 0.0698173142475 143% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.