The following appeared in a recommendation from the planning department of the city of Transopolis.
"Ten years ago, as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program, the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway. Subsequently, several factories were constructed there, crime rates in the area declined, and property tax revenues for the entire city increased. To further revitalize the city, we should now take similar action in a declining residential area on the opposite side of the city. Since some houses and apartments in existing nearby neighborhoods are currently unoccupied, alternate housing for those displaced by this action will be readily available."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the argument suggests adaptation of a urban renewal program to revitalize the city of transopolis. But his argument lacks considerable amount of supporting evidence. He has to provide information about the city’s current physical area and also information about economic and social conditions of the city, now and ten years ago.
First of all, author cites a urban renewal program that was adapted by transopolis ten years ago and comes to a conclusion that similar renewal program should be undertaken now to revitalize the city. Hence, author implicitly assumes that the economic and social conditions currently prevailing in the city are same as that they were ten years ago when urban renewal program was adapted. This assumption is wrong. Thus, for author to strengthen his argument he must provide adequate analogies between past and current social and economic conditions. Previously, when urban renewal program was adapted there might be severe unemployment in the city, thus construction of factories helped tackle unemployment and lead to upliftment of the city. But now, city might not be facing any problem of unemployment and thus constructing more factories will not have similar effect on conditions of cities as it had ten years ago. Therefore, adequate information regarding past and present social and economic condition must be given by author to come to any solid conclusion.
Also, author asserts that similar measures as taken ten years ago should be taken now in the opposite part of the city in a declining residential area. But author has not provided any information about the current state of Transopolis city. For instance, ten years ago when renewal measures were taken, transopolis might have been a small city and thus the renewal program consequently benefited the entire city. But now, after ten years, transopolis might be a huge city with very large expanse and hence adaptation of renewal program in one part of the city might not help the entire city and thus bring no significant change in prevailing conditions of the city. Therefore, to make his argument more persuasive, author must provide information about current expanse of the Transopolis city.
Thus in conclusion, authors argument is weak as it lacks vital evidence. Author must provide information about the city’s current expanse and its current prevailing social and economic conditions. He also needs to provide information about conditions prevailing in the city ten years ago when urban renewal program was adapted and highlight some similarities between past and current conditions of the city. But as such now, author's argument is flawed and not persuasive.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'as to', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260683760684 0.25644967241 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.141025641026 0.15541462614 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.111111111111 0.0836205057962 133% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0747863247863 0.0520304965353 144% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0213675213675 0.0272364105082 78% => OK
Prepositions: 0.104700854701 0.125424944231 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0470085470085 0.0416121511921 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82884687842 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0213675213675 0.026700313972 80% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0747863247863 0.113004496875 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.025641025641 0.0255425247493 100% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0106837606838 0.0127820249294 84% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2693.0 2731.13054187 99% => OK
No of words: 428.0 446.07635468 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.29205607477 6.12365571057 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.383177570093 0.378187486979 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.310747663551 0.287650121315 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.205607476636 0.208842608468 98% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.154205607477 0.135150697306 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82884687842 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 207.018472906 79% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.380841121495 0.469332199767 81% => OK
Word variations: 40.9847743186 52.1807786196 79% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 22.5263157895 23.2022227129 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5426811554 57.7814097925 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.736842105 141.986410481 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5263157895 23.2022227129 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.724660767414 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 53.6010821446 51.9672348444 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.73873873874 1.8405768891 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477374141317 0.441005458295 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.132765150122 0.135418324435 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.128724558293 0.0829849096947 155% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.526376960477 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.17281873996 0.147661913831 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.21630626253 0.193483328276 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.162443440764 0.0970749176394 167% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.523868461249 0.42659136922 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0161501865409 0.0774707102158 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.398770445187 0.312017818177 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126763538159 0.0698173142475 182% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.82389162562 248% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the performance of average users. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations to cover all aspects.