The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy — and generate additional tax revenues — is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the memo avers that the best way to improve rgw economic and financial conditions of the town of Hopewell is building a resort hotel and introducing a golf course. The main reason die this argument is based on the assumption that the neighboring town of Ocean View could succeed in increasing tax revenues from the aforementioned policy. However, this assumption is unwarranted and accompanied by some logical fallacies. Therefore, it is not possible to follow the mayor's idea unless more concrete evidence is presented.
To begin with, although the author claims that the growth of the tourism industry and the emergence of new businesses in Ocean View have resulted from the newly built resort hotel and golf course, this opinion is not cogent as the memorandum does not show any clear connection between them. During the previous two years, many changes might happen in addition to the construction of the hotel and building the golf course. For example, new exhibit sites, galleries, theme parks, and museums might be opened. It is also possible that the transportation network around Ocean View has recently developed and that is why more tourists could visit the town compared to the past. Without the scrutiny of such variables, it is not reasonable to confirm that the only reason for the increased tourism is the golf course and the hotel. Similarly, the new businesses might appear because of a myriad of reasons including population growth and newly found natural resources.
Furthermore, the mayor does not clearly reveal the amount of growth in tourism and businesses. Although he states that the revenues have increased by thirty percent, there is no clue that this increase is based on the aforementioned growth in specific fields. It can be supposed that there have been a plethora of other factors. For instance, the municipal government might raise taxes or the residents were inclined to consume more as their income level has been higher. Thus, it is unclear if the tax revenues have increased because of the tourism industry and newly founded businesses. In this situation, even if it can be proved that the golf course and the hotel are related to tourism and businesses, it cannot be said that they are associated with the additional tax revenues.
Besides, even if it appears true that Ocean View could have more tax revenues and the growth of tourism and businesses thanks to the golf course and the resort hotel, the same strategy does not guarantee the same result. The success of Ocean View seems to be related to other important factors as well. For example, the majority of the inhabitants of the town or nearby areas may enjoy golf as their main leisure activity. It should be also considered that Ocean View has a lot of spaces that allow the construction of large facilities such as the resort hotel. There is no evidence that Hopewell has the same conditions. Hence, the mere application of the successful policy of another town would not result in the same level of success.
Finally, it should be also noted that the new change in Ocean View happened two years ago. Therefore, the present circumstance is not the same. It is possible that the composition of the dwㄷellers of Hopewell have changed during two years and their preferences and income levels can be part of these changes. In this situation, even if other conditions of Hopewell were similar to Ocean View, the same consequence cannot be expected in the present time.
In conclusion, the mayor's argument is not cogent unless he presents more concrete data to support his main argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 605 350
No. of Characters: 2936 1500
No. of Different Words: 252 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.96 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.853 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.553 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 208 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 154 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.407 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.267 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.741 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.495 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 480, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mayors'' or 'mayor's'?
Suggestion: mayors'; mayor's
...efore, it is not possible to follow the mayors idea unless more concrete evidence is p...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s more concrete evidence is presented. To begin with, although the author claim...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wth and newly found natural resources. Furthermore, the mayor does not clearly ...
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...residents were inclined to consume more as their income level has been higher. Thu...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ated with the additional tax revenues. Besides, even if it appears true that Oc...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t result in the same level of success. Finally, it should be also noted that th...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...annot be expected in the present time. In conclusion, the mayors argument is no...
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Line 6, column 25, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mayors'' or 'mayor's'?
Suggestion: mayors'; mayor's
... present time. In conclusion, the mayors argument is not cogent unless he presen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2999.0 2260.96107784 133% => OK
No of words: 605.0 441.139720559 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95702479339 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95951083803 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64039123423 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 204.123752495 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43305785124 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 936.9 705.55239521 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8975724354 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.074074074 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4074074074 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378715141654 0.218282227539 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882174300174 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690413774784 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176985901945 0.128457276422 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947609641415 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 98.500998004 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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