The following report appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health
Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly
reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby
East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or
twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish
can prevent colds. Since colds represent the most frequently given reason for
absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid—a
nutritional supplement derived from fish oil—as a good way to prevent colds and
lower absenteeism."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate
the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the
argument.
The following argument is flawed for number of reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on unwarranted assumption that less number of visit to doctors’ account for less cold. In addition, it falsely establishes a relationship that consuming high amount of fish prevents cold and ultimately less people will take leave, rendering it’s main conclusion that people in West Meria should include a supplement derived from fish oil to prevent cold and lower absenteeism in schools and workplaces, invalid.
The argument fails to provide justification that less number of patients visiting doctors accounts for less occurrences of cold. The report considers the case of East Meria where number of people visiting doctor for treatment of cold is significantly low. And, falsely establishes a relationship that high consumption of fish accounts for less cold. It may be the case that as there are various home-grown treatments for cold and/or due to high fees of doctors, the people of East Meria don’t visit doctors and cure themselves at home. Even if that’s not the case, one cannot say that consuming fish is the sole factor to prevent cold. The report needs to support the argument by citing a credible research that proves that high fish consumption prevents cold.
The argument also leaves many unanswered questions. People of West Meria may have deliberately reported cold as reason for being absent at schools and workplaces to get an extra leave. The health council should’ve collected doctor’s receipt of absentees from schools and workplaces, if absentees have provided that in first place, and check its validity before coming to the conclusion.
Finally, the argument claims without warrant that fish oil provides same curing capabilities as fish itself. And ichthaid which is derived from fish oil is perfect replacement for fish. A thorough scientific research is required to prove this statement.
Because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make convincing case that to lower absenteeism and prevent cold, people in West Meria should include ichthaid in their daily meals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 297, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...nt of fish prevents cold and ultimately less people will take leave, rendering it&ap...
^^^^
Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun occurrences is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... patients visiting doctors accounts for less occurrences of cold. The report conside...
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Line 3, column 698, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'credible research'.
Suggestion: credible research
...needs to support the argument by citing a credible research that proves that high fish consumption ...
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Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'thorough scientific research'.
Suggestion: Thorough scientific research
...sh oil is perfect replacement for fish. A thorough scientific research is required to prove this statement. ...
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Line 9, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... include ichthaid in their daily meals.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, may, so, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 337.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39465875371 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86478500162 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516320474777 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0841594995 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.625 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8125 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131454197567 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476765244724 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505865191706 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848040471034 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650408892139 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.