The following was written as a part of an application for a small-business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe. "Jazz music is extremely popular in the city of Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight. Also, a number of well-known jazz musicians own homes in Monroe. Nevertheless, the nearest jazz club is over an hour away. Given the popularity of jazz in Monroe and a recent nationwide study indicating that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment, we predict that our new jazz music club in Monroe will be a tremendously profitable enterprise."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The argument of developers in support of the profitablity of their music club is based on their assessment of the popularity of the jazz music in the city of Monroe. The instances given in support of the popularity includes: a summer jazz festival in Monroe which was attended by 100,000 people last year; the top rated radio program being on jazz; and the presence of homes of jazz musicians in the city. But the conclusions derived from the presence of these instances are riddled with assumptions, which lead to questions which, if not answered, put the evaluation in a serious position of doubt. Some of these assumptions are: that the 100,000 people were from the Monroe itself; that there is no other cause for the presence of jazz owner's homes in the city other than the popularity of the jazz in the city itself; and that the $1,000 per year statistic which is based on a national study, is a good estimate for Monroe city too.
It is concluded from the presence of 100,000 people in the jazz festival in the city that the people of Monroe are big fan of jazz. But in reality it could be that most of the people who attended the festivals were aliens. In which case, it needs to be answered whether there were significant amount of people in the festival from the Monroe city itself.
It is cited as the reason that since there are many homes in Monroe belonging to the jazz musicians, the music is popular in the city. But it could be the case that some other factor is attracting the musicians to own homes in the city, such as economical homes, or presence of music production industry nearby, etc. The influence of such factors undemines the argument of resultant popularity.
It is not apparant from the argument that $1,000 spending capability of the fans per year is a profitable number for the club. After correctly estimating the number of prospective fans attending the club, the number should be ensured to be enough for generating desriable profit. More importantly, the number given here is based on the national study. This implies that there could be a variation -- even significant one -- in the number for the Monroe city only. The consequence of invalidity of the number for Monroe would mean failure of the argument in favour of prfitability of the jazz club.
Another subtle assumption is based on the distance of the nearest existing jazz club. It should be questioned whether the one hour drive is really something which a jazz fan takes into account while choosing a place to listen jazz music at. It may happen that a music fan may choose an existing club over a new club, not priroitizing the one hour drive, which happens when the time is not a pressing matter. Thus, the study of such a behavior among jazz fans should be studied.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.283553875236 0.25644967241 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.132325141777 0.15541462614 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0529300567108 0.0836205057962 63% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0283553875236 0.0520304965353 54% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0245746691871 0.0272364105082 90% => OK
Prepositions: 0.170132325142 0.125424944231 136% => OK
Participles: 0.0491493383743 0.0416121511921 118% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5186650173 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0113421550095 0.026700313972 42% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.147448015123 0.113004496875 130% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0170132325142 0.0255425247493 67% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0207939508507 0.0127820249294 163% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2777.0 2731.13054187 102% => OK
No of words: 490.0 446.07635468 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66734693878 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.3 0.378187486979 79% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.216326530612 0.287650121315 75% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.157142857143 0.208842608468 75% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0979591836735 0.135150697306 72% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5186650173 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 207.018472906 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420408163265 0.469332199767 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.3104942224 52.1807786196 91% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 25.7894736842 23.2022227129 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0059866648 57.7814097925 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.157894737 141.986410481 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7894736842 23.2022227129 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.421052631579 0.724660767414 58% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 47.4221267454 51.9672348444 91% => OK
Elegance: 2.71428571429 1.8405768891 147% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.575969996857 0.441005458295 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.214351520935 0.135418324435 158% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.115422312665 0.0829849096947 139% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.689121291515 0.58762219726 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128121990306 0.147661913831 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.291551895653 0.193483328276 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146283797223 0.0970749176394 151% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.564759005611 0.42659136922 132% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.104777273527 0.0774707102158 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.424266220478 0.312017818177 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117004369442 0.0698173142475 168% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.33743842365 180% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 6.46551724138 217% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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