An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The piece of information is interesting, but nonetheless not very convincing. The author needs to answer several questions before claiming that promoting this new type of millet is enough to combat the Vitamin A deficiency.
First, what is the amount of Vitamin A in this new type of millet? is this enough to combat the deficiency? Also, other alternatives should be considered. What are the other sources of Vitamin A? Are the other sources compared with this millet? The author uses the word 'high' in describing the Vitamin A quantity in this new millet and not the word 'highest'. Thus, is there any other source which has more amount of Vitamin A than this new type of millet?
Considering that this new type of millet is indeed the best of all the sources of Vitamin A, How many seeds are available of this new type of millet? What is the amount of subsidy provided to an individual farmer? Will the amount of millet obtained from farms after providing subsidies enough to feed the entire population?
The author says that millet is a staple food in Tagus but further evidence is required to bolster the author's claim.
For how many people is millet a staple food in Tagus? This will give us an exact idea whether people will adopt it.
The author finally claims that the government should take diligent efforts in the promotion of this new type of millet. Is promotion of millet the only possible solution for the government? If the author would have mentioned the other potential Vitamin A sources and how millet is better than those sources then his recommendation would be more cogent.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'then', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.273333333333 0.25644967241 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.15 0.15541462614 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.106666666667 0.0836205057962 128% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0433333333333 0.0520304965353 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.01 0.0272364105082 37% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123333333333 0.125424944231 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0433333333333 0.0416121511921 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.51653811184 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.02 0.026700313972 75% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.136666666667 0.113004496875 121% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0233333333333 0.0255425247493 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.02 0.0127820249294 156% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1601.0 2731.13054187 59% => OK
No of words: 277.0 446.07635468 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7797833935 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.57801047555 89% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.361010830325 0.378187486979 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.223826714801 0.287650121315 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126353790614 0.208842608468 61% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.086642599278 0.135150697306 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51653811184 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 207.018472906 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465703971119 0.469332199767 99% => OK
Word variations: 44.1411653631 52.1807786196 85% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 15.3888888889 23.2022227129 66% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5364986525 57.7814097925 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9444444444 141.986410481 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3888888889 23.2022227129 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 37.771560369 51.9672348444 73% => OK
Elegance: 2.16393442623 1.8405768891 118% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.482958319203 0.441005458295 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.173739230985 0.135418324435 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.136289114624 0.0829849096947 164% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.614471233873 0.58762219726 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171036128816 0.147661913831 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.203104863548 0.193483328276 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11423394722 0.0970749176394 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.310347121032 0.42659136922 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.194704614236 0.0774707102158 251% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292421830407 0.312017818177 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100899238411 0.0698173142475 145% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 5.36822660099 19% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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