An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
While it may be true that the government of Tagus ought to focus more on promoting the new breed of millet, this author's argument does not make a cogent case with the necessity of millet breeding among farmers of Tagus.It is easy to understand why the international development organization would want a free vitamin A deficient nation but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions and thus, not strong enough to convince farmers to grow the crop.
Citing surveys among the people, the international organization claims vitamin A deficiency among people of Tagus.It is not clear however the scope and validity of the information the author has.For example, the organization may have asked two residents of Tagus and found the families deficient of vitamin A or may have found that each family has at most one or two members containing deficiency.We just do not know. It is also possible that many old people might be deficient of vitamin A and the youth and middle aged population might have enough content of this vitamin but have not been checked by the organization officials.
Additionally,the author implies that millet is already a staple food in Tagus. Despite this, growing more millet ,yet a little different can result in depreciation of revenue of the nation as the farmers would have to eliminate other crops that they have been growing in order to make place for this on one's fields. Also, this new millet will only be sold in Tagus and might not make much profit as the nation would in international crop and food market.
However, the author does state that farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet which may result in maintaining the farmers profit and income as before. But, if the subsidies are more profitable than the previous incomes of farmers, Tagus could suffer a great loss in the international market and may loose its position in the economy.
A healthy nation would yield to a better future for itself and if the new crops could be used in the international market,Tagus could advantage its revenue and position in the world.Although, this author's argument does not likely support and persuade the Tagus government to make efforts to promote this new type of millet ampng the nation's farmers.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.278325123153 0.25644967241 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.150246305419 0.15541462614 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.076354679803 0.0836205057962 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.051724137931 0.0520304965353 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0147783251232 0.0272364105082 54% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128078817734 0.125424944231 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0394088669951 0.0416121511921 95% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72270438313 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0221674876847 0.026700313972 83% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.118226600985 0.113004496875 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0467980295567 0.0255425247493 183% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00492610837438 0.0127820249294 39% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2269.0 2731.13054187 83% => OK
No of words: 382.0 446.07635468 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.93979057592 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.342931937173 0.378187486979 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.246073298429 0.287650121315 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.146596858639 0.208842608468 70% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0968586387435 0.135150697306 72% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72270438313 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 207.018472906 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486910994764 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 52.0328351429 52.1807786196 100% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 20.039408867 45% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 42.4444444444 23.2022227129 183% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 122.038953506 57.7814097925 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 252.111111111 141.986410481 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.4444444444 23.2022227129 183% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.724660767414 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 3.58251231527 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 67.0517742874 51.9672348444 129% => OK
Elegance: 2.05681818182 1.8405768891 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.482626333754 0.441005458295 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.223022817976 0.135418324435 165% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0911519856389 0.0829849096947 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.786970966599 0.58762219726 134% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.162317814993 0.147661913831 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.25849739164 0.193483328276 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578767899422 0.0970749176394 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.392854253622 0.42659136922 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0628807566559 0.0774707102158 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327487447017 0.312017818177 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351399049714 0.0698173142475 50% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.87684729064 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 5.36822660099 19% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 14.657635468 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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