An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The argument above claims that the Government of Tagus could counter the problem of deficiency in Vitamin A through new variety of millets. The argument further claims that these new crops can be readily adoptable by people and the government should fully endorse this crop. However certain claims on which the argument is based may not be true in all situations.
The argument states that an international organization has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. It states that in spite of the high cost of this new brand of millets, the farmers will be paid subsidies for adopting these new millets. While it seems convincing immediately, it may still not persuade farmers to adopt this variety. For one, it is not stated on how long these subsidies will be made available. It is possible that these subsidies are being allowed only for a very short time. Given this scenario, many farmers may not choose to switch to this variety in the long term. They may switch back to the older variety once the subsidy expires. Other possible scenarios are if there could be a need to a change in the farming techniques involved in farming this new variety of millets. Farmers may not be ready to accept this new crop as the initial cost in adopting these techniques could be pretty high. Hence, without the above considerations it is less likely that the farmers would readily start farming the new variety of millets.
The arguments further assumes that people will readily adopt to this new variety as millet is their staple food. Several factors may be involved in peoples choice for millet as their staple food. If the new variety doesn't taste better or happens to be very expensive, people may not readily adopt to this variety. It is possible however that may people may still prefer this just because of the health reasons. But in order to do so, the government must ensure that the importance of vitamin A is clearly demonstrated to the people. Without the above considerations there is little reason to the claim on why people would readily adopt to the new variety.
The author finally states that the government of Tagus must endorse the new variety of millets in order to counter the vitamin A deficiency. However, there is little evidence on why this should be the only way. Government fundings are typically limited and it may limit them in pursuing multiple strategies to counter a problem. In doing so, a reasonable way would be to consider all possible solutions to the problem and choosing the most effective and an economical one. It is possible that there other simpler ways, such as vitamin A supplements that when distributed through health clinics could produce a far more desirous result than the above one. It would be difficult to conclude without elucidating on the efficacy of the millet strategy over other possible strategies.
As stated above, without further analysis on each of the above claims stated, the argument is far from being persuasive.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'such as', 'in spite of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220802919708 0.25644967241 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.149635036496 0.15541462614 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10401459854 0.0836205057962 124% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0656934306569 0.0520304965353 126% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0255474452555 0.0272364105082 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127737226277 0.125424944231 102% => OK
Participles: 0.043795620438 0.0416121511921 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54917721986 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0328467153285 0.026700313972 123% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.124087591241 0.113004496875 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0474452554745 0.0255425247493 186% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0109489051095 0.0127820249294 86% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2994.0 2731.13054187 110% => OK
No of words: 510.0 446.07635468 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.87058823529 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.57801047555 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.362745098039 0.378187486979 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.278431372549 0.287650121315 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.154901960784 0.208842608468 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.078431372549 0.135150697306 58% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54917721986 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 207.018472906 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411764705882 0.469332199767 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.8525991066 52.1807786196 90% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.039408867 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.6153846154 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.5738058953 57.7814097925 46% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.153846154 141.986410481 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.423076923077 0.724660767414 58% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 47.4585218703 51.9672348444 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.62878787879 1.8405768891 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412749552484 0.441005458295 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.142957371231 0.135418324435 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0850469124142 0.0829849096947 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.515827712961 0.58762219726 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.164775014044 0.147661913831 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160666093781 0.193483328276 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118104740688 0.0970749176394 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.439066691031 0.42659136922 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.119659612674 0.0774707102158 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262682984319 0.312017818177 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109634388663 0.0698173142475 157% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.82512315271 187% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.82389162562 283% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 14.657635468 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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