Monarch Books should open a cafe in its store to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened a cafe. Monarch, which has been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer following because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Opening the cafe would clearly attract more customers. The cafe would require relatively little space. Space could be made for the cafe by discontinuing the children's book section, which will likely become less popular given that the last national census indicated a significant decline in the percent of the population who are under age ten.
In this argument the speaker concludes that Monarch Books should open a cafe inside its store to attract more customers. Monarch Books has been functioning since more than twenty years at same location and hence has a large customer following. The author also states that cafe should be opened in the space generated by discontinuing the children's book section because last census states that number of children population is decreasing. However, the argument isproblematic in several critical respects.
First of all, the author asserts that Monarch Books has a large number of customer following and hence it will also attract more customers by opening the cafe. But this assumption is completelt baseless. The customers which are currently relying on Monarch Books are because of its wide selection of books. This doesn't imply they will be attracted towards the cafe opened by Monarch Books. There is also a possibility that the city in which Monarch Books is located might have some well established cafe which may have hegemony over others. Hence people may not prefer the cafe at the Monarch Books.
Secondly, the author ascertains that cafe would require relatively low space but no evidence has been provided about this claim. It is possible that cafe might require significant amount of space. Also, author suggests to discontinue children's book section, which will likely become less popular given that the last national census indicated a significant decline in the percent of the population who are under age ten. This statement has some flaws. Author has not provided when was the last census conducted. Statistics might have changed after the last census has been conducted. However the decline in percent of children population does not prove that there is decrease in number of sales of children's books.
Finally, the author states opening a cafe will help Monarch Books in competing with Regal Books, which has recently opened a cafe. For competing with Regal Books cafe might not be the best of options. Given that Regal Books succeeded, does not confirm the success of Monarch Books.
In sum, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument author must prove robust statistical data supporting the argument such as date of last census, details about the sales of children's books, other cafe owners in the city etc.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...e author asserts that Monarch Books has a large number of customer following and hence it will al...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...se of its wide selection of books. This doesnt imply they will be attracted towards th...
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Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch Books is located might have some well established cafe which may have hegemony...
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Line 3, column 543, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...fe which may have hegemony over others. Hence people may not prefer the cafe at the M...
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Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests discontinuing'.
Suggestion: suggests discontinuing
...gnificant amount of space. Also, author suggests to discontinue childrens book section, which will like...
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Line 5, column 584, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ter the last census has been conducted. However the decline in percent of children popu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49791579789 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463541666667 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.7605890042 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1818181818 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4545454545 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86363636364 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.473450277979 0.218282227539 217% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138784457883 0.0743258471296 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13636312713 0.0701772020484 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273650766064 0.128457276422 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.179283044325 0.0628817314937 285% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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