In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend — the city-run public schools — comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools — even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do.
In a letter of Parson City's local newspaper, the editor stated that residents of Parson City is more concerned about public school education than Blue City residents. The author has come to this point based on the difference of spending money on public schools which major part come from the taxes of residents. However, without answering some questions this statement will be remained skeptical.
Firstly, is it fair to compare between somethings based on recent events? A single event might not enough for evaluating a situation for every time. Does it indicate all years that Parson city recently spent almost twice as Blue City, both are cities from Trillura region, spent? Whatever, it is possible that the past days, Blue City spent more money than Parson City for its public schools. There might be reason of spending more money recent years as like for solving the problem of classroom shortage, or decorating the old buildings etc. So, if either of these scenarios has merit, the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weaken.
Another question is, is the money Parson city recently spent on public school from the taxes of public? It might be happened it has come from a donation for improving school facilities which is not the money of Parson city residents. May be parson city people spent less money than blue city but this year it becomes more because of donation. For example, every year BRAC, an organization working for developing education in less advance areas, is donating lot of money for improving the educational institutes which are not developed enough. If it is true there is no credit of residents of parson city, they are not placing a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City.
Thirdly, what is the ratio of public schools’ students of Parson city and Blue city? More clearly, do the same amounts of residents mean same amounts of students at public schools? Had the amounts vary from one another, it means more students need more money. Blue city may be having a fewer student on public school, may be there spending is well enough for the students they have. Indeed, if the students at public schools are same in both cities, they value of the money could be different from those cities. A school need more money where the living cost is high than that of lower living cost. So, if the living cost in Parson city differ from Blue city, school’s costing must be different from one another. If the Parson city is more costly than Blue city, then the residents of Parson city must spend a more money than Blue city. It doesn’t matter whether they are concern of public schools’ education or not.
Considering all these probable circumstances, the statement from the prompt is flawed severely. Before concluding, the editor needs to think again about these questions. If the more evidences about the asked questions take the side of Blue city residents than it will be clear the editor is right at his point.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 513 350
No. of Characters: 2423 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.759 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.723 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.303 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.52 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.414 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.48 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.349 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 650, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'weakened'.
Suggestion: weakened
... the original argument is significantly weaken. Another question is, is the money Pa...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s to think again about these questions. If the more evidences about the asked ques...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, third, thirdly, well, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2494.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 512.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87109375 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40552698147 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443359375 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8231987131 57.8364921388 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.9230769231 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61538461538 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367440993779 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127345254112 0.0743258471296 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108030877407 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223456501606 0.128457276422 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.095485592074 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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