This past winter, 200 students from Waymarsh State College traveled to the state capitol building to protest against
proposed cuts in funding for various state college programs. The other 12,000 Waymarsh students evidently weren’t
so concerned about their education: they either stayed on campus or left for winter break. Since the group who did
not protest is far more numerous, it is more representative of the state’s college students than are the protesters.
Therefore the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students.
According to the article that appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper, this past winter, 200 students from Waymarsh state college traveled to the state capitol building to protest against the proposed cuts in funding for various state college programs. Article is stating that, as around 12000 students of the same State College didn't participate in the protest, the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students. Article conclusion is supported by the fact that students who participated in the protest are very less compared to students who did not take part in the protest. In this line of reasoning, articles fails to take into consideration various factors because of which conclusion seems to be dubious.
First of all, article is not telling anything about 200 students who participated in the protest. These 200 students might be representative of various state college programs. Usually, whenever there is a protest, representatives of various programs takes part in the protest instead of every single student from that particular program. It might be the case that it is difficult to arrange for the logistic that is why every student from State College is not taking part in the protest. Hence, some representatives from each program is taking part in the protest. So just rejecting the appeals of the protesting students based on the count is not logical. These students might be representing every other student of the college. So author of the article need to look at the roles of these students before coming to any sound conclusion.
Secondly, every college has a student union. Student union members are chosen to take care of needs of the college students. These 200 students might be members of student union and hence are the only one who are taking part in the protest. So author should also first ask the protesting students whether these students are representing the whole college or these students are protesting only for themselves. Then only, author can substantiate whether state legislature need to heed the appeals of the protesting students or not.
Thirdly, students usually do not have money during college days. It might be the case that because of money constraints only few students are able to come to the capitol building. Hence, author should also ask the students who are not taking part in the protest to know the real reason why they are not taking part in the protest.
Hence, just looking the ratio of student who are protesting and who are not protesting, a sound conclusion cannot be stated. Author needs to look whether these 200 students are representing all the students and why 12000 students are not taking part in the protest. Only by taking care into consideration these factors, author can state a sound conclusion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 345, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 466.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06223175966 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.682297852 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.371244635193 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9904684928 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.565217391 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2608695652 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73913043478 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382525764927 0.218282227539 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146221547134 0.0743258471296 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120165613434 0.0701772020484 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251408216134 0.128457276422 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118833415148 0.0628817314937 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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