“People who use the artificial sweetener aspartame are better off consuming sugar, since aspartame can actually contribute to weight gain rather than weight loss. For example, high levels of aspartame have been shown to trigger a craving for food by depleting the brain of a chemical that registers satiety, or the sense of being full. Furthermore, studies suggest that sugars, if consumed after at least 45 minutes of continuous exercise, actually enhance the body’s ability to burn fat. Consequently, those who drink aspartame-sweetened juices after exercise will also lose this
calorie-burning benefit. Thus it appears that people consuming aspartame rather than sugar are unlikely to achieve their dietary goals.”
The above argument claims that aspartame, the artificial sweetener, causes consumers to gain weight as it was experienced that aspartame, in large amount, induces ruining the chemical which is responsible for being full. Additionally, the experiments propose that consuming the sugar after continued exercise enhances weight loss. Thus, this argument asserts that people who consume aspartame-sweetened drinks are deprived from this advantage of sugar. Consequently, the aspartame trigger to gain weight more than sugar. The conclusion of the argument relies on the assumption for which there is not lucid evidence. Hence, the argument is not convincing and has several loopholes.
First, the author claims that consuming sugar after the continued exercise speeds the weight loss process. It is not feasible to think that the opposite results will work for reverse products. The experiment does not demonstrate the impact of aspartame after continued exercising. The artificial sweetener may show the same result as sugar. The author has simply skipped this line of reasoning. Hence, we can say that although the author's argument might be true, he should have collected more evidence in his favour.
Another point is about the author has mentioned the negative impact of aspartame in big doses and has not provided any sample of consuming the aspartame-sweetened products in normal doses. There is no sufficient evidence to claim that the aspartame triggers obesity. Hence, it can be concluded that this argument is incomplete and deprived of enough study. Therefore, this conclusion is not very convincing
There is one more low point of this argument. According to the conclusion of this argument,
people who prefer artificial sweetener to sugar tend to gain weight more promptly. Nevertheless, the weight of man does depend simply on consumption level of sugar either aspartame. There are plenty of other factors affecting the weight of man: the lifestyle, the consumption degree of fast food or pastry and etc. The sugar consists of a small degree of daily ration of average man. So, the ignorance of other consumed factors questions the consequence of study itself. The author has overlooked all these factors, hence, the argument cannot be concluded on the basis of these statements.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. The author should take into consideration other features that impact the body of humanbeings. Moreover, one should analyse meticulously the results of study and interpret it correctly. Before any decision is made, all these things must be considered. In the end, we can say that this argument needs a detailed study of many other factors and the author should have provided a few proofs and data to establish this relationship
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251012145749 0.25644967241 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.168016194332 0.15541462614 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0910931174089 0.0836205057962 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0445344129555 0.0520304965353 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0182186234818 0.0272364105082 67% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113360323887 0.125424944231 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0485829959514 0.0416121511921 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9454632508 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0161943319838 0.026700313972 61% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.125506072874 0.113004496875 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0242914979757 0.0255425247493 95% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0121457489879 0.0127820249294 95% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2833.0 2731.13054187 104% => OK
No of words: 443.0 446.07635468 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.39503386005 6.12365571057 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.422121896163 0.378187486979 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.293453724605 0.287650121315 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.243792325056 0.208842608468 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.169300225734 0.135150697306 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9454632508 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 207.018472906 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492099322799 0.469332199767 105% => OK
Word variations: 55.3571620777 52.1807786196 106% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.039408867 135% => OK
Sentence length: 16.4074074074 23.2022227129 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.936161744 57.7814097925 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.925925926 141.986410481 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4074074074 23.2022227129 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.444444444444 0.724660767414 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 45.7527798679 51.9672348444 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.78947368421 1.8405768891 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288091387391 0.441005458295 65% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0970776316826 0.135418324435 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0728222721505 0.0829849096947 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.529981709441 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15124361142 0.147661913831 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114661611599 0.193483328276 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084467755781 0.0970749176394 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.42278718915 0.42659136922 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.100460169056 0.0774707102158 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185683242995 0.312017818177 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842979029039 0.0698173142475 121% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.87684729064 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.82512315271 207% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 11.0 5.36822660099 205% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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