Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Pirouettes Ballet School states that it is the best choice for a great ballet career for the kids. But in the process of stating so Pirouettes Ballet School, forgets to clarify few more details or probably, it assumes a few facts that needs clarification to reach a cogent conclusion that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best place for any kid who surely wants to be a great ballet dancer.
The argument mentions Pirouettes Ballet School has the most intensive program in town. Does that imply that the kids would be able to cope with the regular school as well as the dance class to their best? Because the kids academics cannot suffer at the cost of their ballet class. Because at a tender age, they need to explore various other career options as well.
As it is also stated in the argument that the teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world, but does that imply that the teachers have enough experience of teaching young kids because teaching and performing are widely different areas. Additionally, are the teachers friendly enough to provide the kids with the best ambience for learning?
Pirouettes Ballet School needs to mention the number of awards or competition the students of their school have won in the past of couple of years in Elmtown or at district or state or national level, which would make the decision process on the parents' part more easier, as it would in a way delineate the success rate of the students of Pirouettes Ballet School.
The argument stands by the fact that many of the students of Pirouettes Ballet School went on to become professional dancers. Now, those who have went on to become professional dancers with the dance companies, were they students of Pirouettes Ballet School right from an early age because if is so only then it guarantees that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best place for a child to learn ballet dance. If those who became professional dancers, were gifted dancers or had learn ballet from a different school, it doesn't showcase the efficient learning-teaching at Pirouettes Ballet School.
Furthermore, the percentage of students who have learned ballet went on to become professional dancers is a crucial fact that needs to be clarified. As it is may be the case that only 1 out of 1000 ballet students went on to become a professional dancer, leaving the chance of the child who enrols for Pirouettes Ballet School to become a professional ballet dancer to a bare minimum of 0.1%.
Moreover, it is important for Pirouettes Ballet School to mention the number of students who enrol for their program every year and the number of kids who drop out every year. This would in a way help the parents who wish to enrol their kids to the school to make a comprehensive decision that is better for the future of their kid.
Before reaching a conclusion, the parents and the guardian need to have a in depth knowledge about various other information that are vital before arriving to a final decision that could have a great impact on their kid's future. If Pirouettes Ballet School, fulfils all the queries that a parent has and assures a great ballet career to their kids, then there is no turning back. Their kids should definitely join Pirouettes Ballet School.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... well as the dance class to their best? Because the kids academics cannot suffer at the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ds with the best ambience for learning? Pirouettes Ballet School needs to mentio...
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Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...ision process on the parents' part more easier, as it would in a way delineate the suc...
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Message: Note: went is a past participle of "wend". Did you mean 'gone' (past participle of "go")?
Suggestion: gone
...ofessional dancers. Now, those who have went on to become professional dancers with ...
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'learned', 'learnt'.
Suggestion: learned; learnt
...nal dancers, were gifted dancers or had learn ballet from a different school, it does...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'learned', 'learnt'.
Suggestion: learned; learnt
...nal dancers, were gifted dancers or had learn ballet from a different school, it does...
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Line 15, column 73, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e parents and the guardian need to have a in depth knowledge about various other ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.282679738562 0.25644967241 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.147058823529 0.15541462614 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0718954248366 0.0836205057962 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0408496732026 0.0520304965353 79% => OK
Pronouns: 0.031045751634 0.0272364105082 114% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130718954248 0.125424944231 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0228758169935 0.0416121511921 55% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63175626573 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0375816993464 0.026700313972 141% => OK
Particles: 0.0016339869281 0.001811407834 90% => OK
Determiners: 0.12091503268 0.113004496875 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0130718954248 0.0255425247493 51% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0245098039216 0.0127820249294 192% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3298.0 2731.13054187 121% => OK
No of words: 563.0 446.07635468 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85790408526 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.57801047555 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.365896980462 0.378187486979 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.225577264654 0.287650121315 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.143872113677 0.208842608468 69% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0923623445826 0.135150697306 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63175626573 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 207.018472906 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401420959147 0.469332199767 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.0404601824 52.1807786196 90% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 29.6315789474 23.2022227129 128% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.2067714787 57.7814097925 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.578947368 141.986410481 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6315789474 23.2022227129 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.526315789474 0.724660767414 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.14285714286 156% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 52.1893054127 51.9672348444 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.99253731343 1.8405768891 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.565930767129 0.441005458295 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.212786642234 0.135418324435 157% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0987016333214 0.0829849096947 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.716410441013 0.58762219726 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171939592405 0.147661913831 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.269987823287 0.193483328276 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122015193107 0.0970749176394 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.422389713425 0.42659136922 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0788863793331 0.0774707102158 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.360900959082 0.312017818177 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695937183043 0.0698173142475 100% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.33743842365 180% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 6.46551724138 170% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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