Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
While the recommendation may be very worthy, there are some questions that one has to ask before the evaluation that entering Pirouettes Ballet School is a very good decision.
First of all, the argument states that the school has got the most intensive program. Nevertheless, it does not answer if it is the most intensive in Elmtown, in the state or even the world. If a child would like to be a top world dancer this question may sound very important to him/her. Moreover, there is an obscure correlation between intensity and efficiency. Sometimes these two terms do not coincide as not all programs that are intensive lead to successful results.
Secondly, the argument uses the word "many" insisting that many of students have succeeded. However, it is unclear what they consider to be many, the exact figures needed to say that this school's graduates have opportunities to make their career with top dance companies. For example, 45% anf 95% of graduates working with top companies are "many", but these two figures describe very disparate situations. The former implies that a little less than a half of graduates will probably work with top firms, while the other one indicates that almost all graduates are guaranteed to sign a contract. That is why it very essential to know the accurate statistics about the graduates' future.
Thirdly, there is a statement that all the teachers have danced in the most outstanding companies. The question is whether they are good teachers as they are the best dancers. Sometimes in many spheres (of science or art) many great professionals are rather ordinary teachers who are not able to make from others professionals as he/she is. To contrast, there are teachers that are not very professional, but they are brilliant tutors who can "make" many exciting artists. Therefore, the question about the teaching skills of the staff is not less vital as the question about the professional ones.
To conclude, there is not enough information to evaluate whether it is a good choice for children to join Pirouettes Ballet School. There should be more data efficiency of programs, teaching skills of staff and the prospect future of the graduates.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'thirdly', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.207637231504 0.25644967241 81% => OK
Verbs: 0.159904534606 0.15541462614 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.109785202864 0.0836205057962 131% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0739856801909 0.0520304965353 142% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0238663484487 0.0272364105082 88% => OK
Prepositions: 0.102625298329 0.125424944231 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0214797136038 0.0416121511921 52% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.93793217716 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0334128878282 0.026700313972 125% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.102625298329 0.113004496875 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0143198090692 0.0255425247493 56% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0143198090692 0.0127820249294 112% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2224.0 2731.13054187 81% => OK
No of words: 364.0 446.07635468 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.10989010989 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.354395604396 0.378187486979 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282967032967 0.287650121315 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241758241758 0.208842608468 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.148351648352 0.135150697306 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93793217716 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 207.018472906 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53021978022 0.469332199767 113% => OK
Word variations: 57.7106851958 52.1807786196 111% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 20.2222222222 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9044551262 57.7814097925 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.555555556 141.986410481 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.944444444444 0.724660767414 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 48.5189255189 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.28703703704 1.8405768891 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45389475746 0.441005458295 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119341189702 0.135418324435 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0798456207107 0.0829849096947 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.53021597092 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.154649018419 0.147661913831 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.183933913143 0.193483328276 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134478043144 0.0970749176394 139% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.309607075536 0.42659136922 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0475599278695 0.0774707102158 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284236808489 0.312017818177 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607231172628 0.0698173142475 87% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.33743842365 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 14.657635468 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.