A recent study with a researcher pretending to have a broken down car on the side of the road showed that when the researcher was a man,
60% of the time, a man pulled over to help them, and 0% of the time a woman stopped to help. When the researcher was a woman,
70% of the time a man stopped to help, and 20% of the time a woman stopped to help.
This study shows how all men are more naturally altruistic than women. It also shows that women care more about helping women than men.
The argument is based on a research in which a researcher pretended to have a broken-down car and collected the stats about how many man and woman stopped to help the researcher. In one case researcher was a man and in another case a woman. The argument is just based on the stats presented. However, there can be lot of the other reasons because of which more men pulled the car to help the researcher in both the cases. In the passage below, I will explain why this argument is dubious and what additional information can substantiate this argument to make it more sound and convincing.
First of all, it might be the case that because of safety reasons women are not willing to pull over their car to help the researcher. As we all know, the number of cases involving rape and harassment against woman are increasing day by day, so woman might think that the person who is standing with the broken car is just another guy who might try to harass or kidnap her if she pulls over her car to help him. Also, in case of woman, 20% of the woman stopped to help her, but nowadays a woman can also not trust the other random woman, as researcher might be just a bait to convince the woman to stop her car to help. Also, increased percentage of men stopping their car when they see a woman can be explained by men looking for opportunities to impress the woman instead of altruistic quality. Hence, if arguments also try to focus on why women didn't stop and also why a large percentage of men stopped to help, then argument can be more sound and convincing.
Also, most of the times, repairing a car requires masculine power and men are always ready to show how macho they are. So, less number of women are pulling over to help might be because of woman thinking that pulling over won't help as they won't be able to help the researcher. But may be in the case when researcher is a woman, some woman stops as they think that a woman can't repair her broken car and she might of some help. Hence, simply stating the altruistic nature is the reason for more men pulling over to help than women is dubious. Author should also take into account different scenarios before coming to this conclusion. Author can conduct some other experiment in which woman can help and man can't help and then try to see how many woman come forward to help in comparison to how many men are coming forward. Based on data from multiple experiment a sound conclusion can be stated.
Hence, before concluding author should also take into account why so many men stopped to help and why women didn't stop to help and as stated, author should also take into account different experiments before coming to a conclusion. Only by taking different data set a sound and more persuasive argument can be stated.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
The argument is based on a research in which a researcher pretended to have...
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Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun man seems to be countable; consider using: 'many men'.
Suggestion: many men
...n car and collected the stats about how many man and woman stopped to help the researche...
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Line 3, column 850, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...rguments also try to focus on why women didnt stop and also why a large percentage of...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... woman stops as they think that a woman cant repair her broken car and she might of ...
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Line 5, column 707, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eriment in which woman can help and man cant help and then try to see how many woman...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... many men stopped to help and why women didnt stop to help and as stated, author shou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, so, then, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2273.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 506.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49209486166 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39393984713 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.387351778656 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7648303319 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.631578947 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6315789474 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295601852833 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107861010936 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987100347642 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198480228053 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0883429134543 0.0628817314937 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 12.5979740519 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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