A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per day, whereas North Americans eat virtually none. It turns out that soy contains phytochemicals called Isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Thus, North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression.
The writer of this argument recommends that eating soy on a regular basis can be consider as a way to prevent fatigue and depression. To support his recommendation, he compared North American and Asian and based on the results of this comparison, he concluded that soy eating is very useful to decline the rate of these types of diseases. This recommendation cannot be accepted because it is based on a number of premises which all of them are questionable.
Firstly, in this argument there is not any evidence to give us information about the sample population. As you know, in research studies the size of the sample population is very important. It must be logical and in appropriate with the concerned population. If this study was done only on 20 persons, its result cannot be accepted and valid. In addition, the population in the sample must select randomly to decrease the distance between its results and real results. In this argument, there is not any evidence to support it. Furthermore, the sample population must be representative of the target population in terms of age, gender, social class, etc. This argument did not support this rule and due to it this study cannot be valid and acceptable.
If it is assumed that this research study is acceptable, in this argument there is not any study to evaluate the genetic similarities between these races. As you know, various persons have different genes and consequently different genotype and phenotype. It is unanimously believed that some people are more sensitive to specific types of illness than other. It can originate from their genes and consequently, genes products, such as proteins, hormones, etc. In addition, some environmental factors can overshadow gene expression. As an illustration, low temperature can lead to over expression of some genes and these products can be harmful for human bodies and result in increasing rate of some types of diseases. Thus, it can be stated that Asian can more tolerate to fatigue and depression genetically than American and diet does not have any prominent impact on its prevention.
On the other hand, the writer did not state anything about the effect of geological factors. Environmental factors can intensify or decline the impact of genetic. Geographical factors such as geographical longitude and latitude, day length, temperature and so on, can have negative or positive effect on illness expression. So this analogy between two continents is weak and cannot be acceptable.
Even if assuming, soy is useful to prevent these illness, the writer stated that soy contains phytochemicals called Isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. There is not any evidence to support this claim. Maybe this effect is a result of a combination of different things in soy and Isoflavones cannot be useful alone. In addition the amount usage (20 grams of soy per day) is not logical. Maybe this amount is suitable for Asian but not proper for American. The amount usage must be defined on the basis of the scientific studies which writer did not say anything about them.
In the final analysis, it can be state that this recommendation specious and it rests on the basis of assumptions which all of them are questionable. It can be accepted only if these weakness were removed and all questions are answered.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 44, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this illness' or 'these illnesses'?
Suggestion: this illness; these illnesses
...n if assuming, soy is useful to prevent these illness, the writer stated that soy contains ph...
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Line 6, column 360, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... Isoflavones cannot be useful alone. In addition the amount usage 20 grams of soy per da...
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Line 7, column 178, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this weakness' or 'these weaknesses'?
Suggestion: this weakness; these weaknesses
...uestionable. It can be accepted only if these weakness were removed and all questions are answ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'in addition', 'such as', 'you know', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.219512195122 0.25644967241 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.144715447154 0.15541462614 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10243902439 0.0836205057962 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0552845528455 0.0520304965353 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0390243902439 0.0272364105082 143% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.126829268293 0.125424944231 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0292682926829 0.0416121511921 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.98133370518 2.79052419416 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0227642276423 0.026700313972 85% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.10243902439 0.113004496875 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0325203252033 0.0255425247493 127% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00650406504065 0.0127820249294 51% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3351.0 2731.13054187 123% => OK
No of words: 552.0 446.07635468 124% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07065217391 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.57801047555 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.36231884058 0.378187486979 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.278985507246 0.287650121315 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.213768115942 0.208842608468 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.13768115942 0.135150697306 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98133370518 2.79052419416 107% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 207.018472906 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43115942029 0.469332199767 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.4723653196 52.1807786196 97% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 20.039408867 150% => OK
Sentence length: 18.4 23.2022227129 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0469108325 57.7814097925 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.7 141.986410481 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 23.2022227129 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.433333333333 0.724660767414 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 46.2985507246 51.9672348444 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.57142857143 1.8405768891 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260114828046 0.441005458295 59% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.118726496861 0.135418324435 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0923223904697 0.0829849096947 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.491149737713 0.58762219726 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128249622931 0.147661913831 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945370013717 0.193483328276 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700385954953 0.0970749176394 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.29045206389 0.42659136922 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0537671234743 0.0774707102158 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181330994882 0.312017818177 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453581367792 0.0698173142475 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.87684729064 204% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.82512315271 207% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 5.36822660099 186% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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