In the argument that raw foods containing antioxidants and supplemental antioxidants work differently, the author concludes that a raw food diet will decrease ones chance at getting a cold. However, there is unsupported evidence and assumptions that make the argument unpersuasive. More information is needed to promote this theory.
The author assumes that difference in antioxidant source is the only difference and must be the explanation as to why one group had a decline in catching the cold. To strengthen this argument, additional evidence about the two different groups is needed. Health experts fail to consider the diversity in the different groups. It is implied that the two groups are filled with the same aged people and heath histories, but there is no direct support of this. If one group was filled with middle aged people who have minimal health issues and the opposing group was filled with people over the age of 65 with extensive health problems this would change the correlation.
It is also implied that the group using antioxidant supplements were eating and doing healthy things. The author failed to consider if this group was only eating unhealthy food while not taking care of themselves. There would need to be more proof of how else this group who had no change in their chance of getting the cold, were living their lives to increase the argument.
Without additional evidence the argument is not persuasive. It is unknown if people who have a raw food diet and people who take supplemental antioxidants differ in their chance of catching a cold.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
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flaws:
need one more argument.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 262 350
No. of Characters: 1295 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.023 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.943 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.666 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.147 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...udes that a raw food diet will decrease ones chance at getting a cold. However, ther...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 55.5748502994 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 262.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07633587786 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73580001338 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496183206107 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9789154875 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.307692308 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150919337133 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562949287487 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987435079825 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129386069978 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906253811386 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 98.500998004 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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