A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The health experts argue that the residents of Mentia will suffer less headaches as companies plan to add salicytes as flavor additives in foods, which till now has been used as preservatives. Supporting the argument is a study spanning twenty years which suggests a correlation between rise in the commercial use of salicytes and decline of reported headaches. Though the argument might have merit number of questions need to be answered and various alternative possibilities to be ruled out before conclusively predicting that the future headaches suffered by residents will be fewer.
The primary support of the argument is the research results and hence the most important questions need to be answered is regarding the scope and validity of conducted study before using its results to predict a future trend. Was the sample used for the study representative of all the residents of Mentia? Was the study able to trace the same sample group over the entirety of the study? Since it is mentioned that the study spanned a time of twenty years it need to be known whether the participants of study continued to reside in Mentia over all the period. If a significant number of subjects moved out and others joined, it can affect the study that the group no longer represents the population of Mentia. Even more important is the the question whether there was any control group, who did not use the processed foods. Was it able to keep them away from processed food for twenty years, which is a quite long period. Without a control group, the results will be blind towards the presence of other possible alternative causes such as improved quality of life etc.
Even if the study was conducted scientifically and the results of the study were subjected to careful scrutiny, there is no evidence that a further increase in the amount of salicytes will prove to be better for reducing headache. Where any studies or research conducted as to determine what is the optimum level of salicytes in food so as alleviate headaches? Why was salicytes not having an effect regardless of their abundance naturally in food? This could well suggest the presence of a lower threshold and a similar chance of upper threshold is to be ruled out before deciding that any increase will just lead to a better effect. Otherwise it could worsen the existing headache or could induce them anew in people
Even when the salicytes prove to be functioning as anodynes with regards to headaches at any concentration, it needs to be known whether they will bw used in the same way(undergoing same chemical treatments), when used as flavour agents, as they were used as preservatives. Processing of the salicyte before added to the food could play a part in its exhibited chemical characteristics, when present in food. Also important is the question whether it will be used with the same foods as it was used as preservatives. If that not be the case it should be studied whether it can lead to a dangerous substance.
Even though the argument is not without merit the questions discussed above are to be answered in order to evaluate the argument.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun headaches is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...hat the residents of Mentia will suffer less headaches as companies plan to add sali...
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Suggestion:
...reservatives. Supporting the argument is a study spanning twenty years which sugg...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ation of Mentia. Even more important is the the question whether there was any control ...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ation of Mentia. Even more important is the the question whether there was any control ...
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...n of Mentia. Even more important is the the question whether there was any control group, who did no...
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Suggestion: Otherwise,
...ease will just lead to a better effect. Otherwise it could worsen the existing headache o...
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Suggestion: Also,
... characteristics, when present in food. Also important is the question whether it wi...
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Suggestion: whether
...when present in food. Also important is the question whether it will be used with the same foods as ...
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Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t can lead to a dangerous substance. Even though the argument is not without merit the q...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'hence', 'if', 'regarding', 'so', 'well', 'as to', 'such as', 'in the same way']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235294117647 0.25644967241 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.192513368984 0.15541462614 124% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0659536541889 0.0836205057962 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.048128342246 0.0520304965353 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.030303030303 0.0272364105082 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.140819964349 0.125424944231 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0623885918004 0.0416121511921 150% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78827153802 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0374331550802 0.026700313972 140% => OK
Particles: 0.00534759358289 0.001811407834 295% => OK
Determiners: 0.119429590018 0.113004496875 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0267379679144 0.0255425247493 105% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.017825311943 0.0127820249294 139% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3128.0 2731.13054187 115% => OK
No of words: 531.0 446.07635468 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89077212806 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.57801047555 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.350282485876 0.378187486979 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269303201507 0.287650121315 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.193973634652 0.208842608468 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.129943502825 0.135150697306 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78827153802 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 207.018472906 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453860640301 0.469332199767 97% => OK
Word variations: 52.9163764643 52.1807786196 101% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.039408867 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.55 23.2022227129 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4943606631 57.7814097925 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.4 141.986410481 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.55 23.2022227129 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.45 0.724660767414 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 53.4803201507 51.9672348444 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.61842105263 1.8405768891 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445592396955 0.441005458295 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.16084594226 0.135418324435 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0984422999585 0.0829849096947 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.5972558906 0.58762219726 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.175507637506 0.147661913831 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.211563788807 0.193483328276 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0883915730152 0.0970749176394 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.440923684891 0.42659136922 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.103435676873 0.0774707102158 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30162821004 0.312017818177 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826616370478 0.0698173142475 118% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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