The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area.Although only a small percentage of the land w

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The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area.Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences foe our area.The company plans to build a small hotel on the land .Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary,there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community,which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.

The Argument conclude that In the sanctuary 300 bird species live in the area.If the small percentage of land will sold to the smith corporation so it devloped a land and make a smal hotel for the visitor are coming in the sanchuary for showing the birds and people will eaisly show the all mangificent of different bird population.But In this argument anthor have many Assemption and holes are show so i disagree for this argument.

Firstly,If the some percentage of land sold to the smith corporation for the development of land but author can not be assume that if land is devloped so some tress are cut for developing the land so it will be many house of birds are destroy so birds are go to the different area and do not come back again.If birds are going to developing the land so it will not the good condition or not of the land peop-le are not show the different birds polpulation ever.

Secondly,Author suggest the if land is develope and small hotel will made so tourists have come more for showing the magnificent bird population but it will be not assume that some tourist are come for show the different birds not for Picnic.It not assume that if hotal made have more time so it will affect the birds for living.Some birds are go for made a hotal and lan development.

Thirdly,Author suggested the company have protect the sanctuary and their plans will do not harm the birds.But any land development are not made without noise polution if it can made so some birds have go to the sanctuary for the noise.Any compay will not develop the land without land is not clear,so birds have many problem for the developing the land it will very harmful for the birds.

Finaly,I Conclude that for this argument if any land of sanctuary it will directly affect on birds living and Some different bird species are go ever in the sanctury and without birds tourist are not come in sanctury so the bird have more so land developing are not doing but we can develop the outside of sanchuary so torits are easy to travaln and see the different birds.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'concludes'.
Suggestion: concludes
The Argument conclude that In the sanctuary 300 bird species ...
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Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...tuary 300 bird species live in the area.If the small percentage of land will sold ...
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Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'sell'
Suggestion: sell
...ea.If the small percentage of land will sold to the smith corporation so it devloped...
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Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...angificent of different bird population.But In this argument anthor have many Assem...
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Line 1, column 404, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...e many Assemption and holes are show so i disagree for this argument. Firstly,...
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Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , If
...i disagree for this argument. Firstly,If the some percentage of land sold to the...
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Line 3, column 16, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...ee for this argument. Firstly,If the some percentage of land sold to the smith co...
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Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun house seems to be countable; consider using: 'many houses'.
Suggestion: many houses
...t for developing the land so it will be many house of birds are destroy so birds are go to...
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Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'destroyed'.
Suggestion: destroyed
...d so it will be many house of birds are destroy so birds are go to the different area a...
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'gone'.
Suggestion: gone
...house of birds are destroy so birds are go to the different area and do not come b...
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Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...fferent area and do not come back again.If birds are going to developing the land ...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: NEED_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'going to develop'?
Suggestion: going to develop
...and do not come back again.If birds are going to developing the land so it will not the good condit...
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Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Author
...rent birds polpulation ever. Secondly,Author suggest the if land is develope and sma...
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Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...f land is develope and small hotel will made so tourists have come more for showing ...
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Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...show the different birds not for Picnic.It not assume that if hotal made have more...
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Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'assumes'?
Suggestion: assumes
...e different birds not for Picnic.It not assume that if hotal made have more time so it...
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Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Some
... so it will affect the birds for living.Some birds are go for made a hotal and lan d...
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Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'gone'.
Suggestion: gone
...ect the birds for living.Some birds are go for made a hotal and lan development. ...
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Line 7, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Author
... a hotal and lan development. Thirdly,Author suggested the company have protect the ...
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Line 7, column 43, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'protected'.
Suggestion: protected
...irdly,Author suggested the company have protect the sanctuary and their plans will do n...
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Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
... their plans will do not harm the birds.But any land development are not made witho...
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Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...t made without noise polution if it can made so some birds have go to the sanctuary ...
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Line 7, column 203, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'gone'.
Suggestion: gone
...ution if it can made so some birds have go to the sanctuary for the noise.Any comp...
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Line 7, column 237, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Any
... have go to the sanctuary for the noise.Any compay will not develop the land withou...
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Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...velop the land without land is not clear,so birds have many problem for the develop...
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Line 7, column 314, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'many problems'.
Suggestion: many problems
...without land is not clear,so birds have many problem for the developing the land it will ver...
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Line 7, column 391, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and it will very harmful for the birds. Finaly,I Conclude that for this argument...
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Line 9, column 7, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
... very harmful for the birds. Finaly,I Conclude that for this argument if any ...
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Line 9, column 84, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
... any land of sanctuary it will directly affect on birds living and Some different bird sp...
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Line 9, column 143, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'gone'.
Suggestion: gone
...ing and Some different bird species are go ever in the sanctury and without birds ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.223958333333 0.25644967241 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.203125 0.15541462614 131% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0911458333333 0.0836205057962 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0807291666667 0.0520304965353 155% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0286458333333 0.0272364105082 105% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125 0.125424944231 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0546875 0.0416121511921 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53837694126 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.015625 0.026700313972 59% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.130208333333 0.113004496875 115% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0364583333333 0.0255425247493 143% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.0127820249294 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2058.0 2731.13054187 75% => OK
No of words: 369.0 446.07635468 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57723577236 6.12365571057 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.252032520325 0.378187486979 67% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.211382113821 0.287650121315 73% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.151761517615 0.208842608468 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.105691056911 0.135150697306 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53837694126 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 207.018472906 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.349593495935 0.469332199767 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 36.1174884481 52.1807786196 69% => OK
How many sentences: 5.0 20.039408867 25% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 73.8 23.2022227129 318% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 33.0998489423 57.7814097925 57% => OK
Chars per sentence: 411.6 141.986410481 290% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 73.8 23.2022227129 318% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.8 0.724660767414 248% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 3.58251231527 837% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 94.9382113821 51.9672348444 183% => OK
Elegance: 1.29166666667 1.8405768891 70% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.483396867202 0.441005458295 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.485424143656 0.135418324435 358% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.017747790046 0.0829849096947 21% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.58762219726 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 1.71995011398e-16 0.147661913831 0% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.376553158009 0.193483328276 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108238604908 0.0970749176394 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.53566568846 0.42659136922 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0177728862836 0.0774707102158 23% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.376553158009 0.312017818177 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108238604908 0.0698173142475 155% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.33743842365 36% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 4.0 14.657635468 27% => More topic words wanted.
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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