"Two years ago, our consultants predicted that West Egg's landfill, which is used for garbage
disposal, would be completely filled within five years. During the past two years, however, town
residents have been recycling twice as much aluminum and paper as they did in previous
years. Next month the amount of material recycled should further increase, since charges for
garbage pickup will double. Furthermore, over ninety percent of the respondents to a recent
survey said that they would do more recycling in the future. Because of our residents' strong
commitment to recycling, the available space in our landfill should last for considerably longer
than predicted."
The Author of this memo concludes that the West Egg residents are strongly committed to recycling because of which the available space in West Egg's landfill should last for longer than what is predicted by consultants.To support this conclusion the author cites that the amount of recycling done by town residents is doubled in last two years and since the charges for garbage pickup will be doubled, the material recycled by West Egg residents will further increase.However, the author argument lies on several doubtful assumptions and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.
First,It is quite possible that aluminum and paper account for only some of the materials West Egg residents can recycle.Perhaps recycling of other recyclable material such as plastic and glass to th e point that the total amount of recycled materials has also declined.If so then the mayor could hardly justify the claim that West Egg's residents are becoming more committed to recycling.
Secondly, the author conclusion relies on the assumption that in the future the material recycled will increase due to increase in charges of garbage pickup.Whereas it is possible that their is no impact of this on the West Egg residents, they might be ready to pay the double charges for garbage pickup.The author’s projection also ignores the possibility that number of town residents will increase in the future, thereby resulting in increase in amount of garbage regardless of whether the garbage pickup charges is increased.Without taking into account these possibilities, the author cannot persuade me that recycling or garbage will increase in the future.
Finally, the author fails to assure me the survey results accurately reflects the desires of the most residents, Without evidence that the respondents desires are representative of those of overall population of West Egg residents it is hasty to draw a conclusion that West Egg residents are strongly committed to recycling.Moreover author provides no information about the number of respondents they had surveyed, the fewer respondents, the less reliable the study results.
In Conclusion,the argument is unconvincing as it stands,to strengthen it the mayor should provide evidence of aluminum and paper form what percentage of total recyclable material and the amount of trash is decreasing or increasing.To strengthen the argument the mayor should provide evidence of expected change in town population.Also,evidence of number of respondents in survey they have conducted, the demographic details of the respondents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, whereas, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53417721519 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29046731213 2.78398813304 118% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463291139241 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 79.0 22.8473053892 346% => Sentence length is too long
Sentence length SD: 99.0494825832 57.8364921388 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 437.2 119.503703932 366% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 79.0 23.324526521 339% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.0 5.70786347227 420% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158666213924 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934703409753 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598759976013 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934703409753 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598759976013 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 44.1 14.3799401198 307% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -17.17 48.3550499002 -36% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 35.3 12.197005988 289% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.98 12.5979740519 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.35 8.32208582834 136% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 33.6 11.1389221557 302% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 11.9071856287 235% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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