Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Baskets with a paritcular, and destinctive pattern were found in a village called Palea, and therefore were assumed to be made by the Palean people. Until recently, this conclusion made sense, but then some baskets with the same distinctive patterns were found in an ancient village called Lithos. Becaue there was no way that the Palean people could have traveled to Lithos, it must be concluded that perhaps the baskets weren’t made just by the Palean people and perhaps this design was not as exclusive as was previously believed. Though the logic behind these two statements seems sound at first, there is a lot that is being assumed here, and there is not necessarily evidence for each of these assumptions.
First, it must be assumed that if these baskets were made exclusively by the Paleans, then the Paleans themselves would have had to have brought the baskets to Lithos themselves. This isn’t necessarily true. The village of Palea and the village of Lithos are seperated by a deep, large river called the Brim River, and the argument is that the Palean pepole, could not have crossed that river with those baskets and brought them to Lithos. Maybe the Palean’s didn’t cross the river, but perhaps some of the baskets did. A basket could have been lost, stolen or simply swept up during a storm, been carried by the river, and could have washed up on the shore in Lithos. If any evidence of this scenario could be found, then it is possible that these baskets were exclusively made by the Palethean people. Artifacts can, will, and have travelled to other lands with out the hands of people.
Second, it must be assumed that the Palean people had no way to cross the river with their baskets. This assumption is based on the absence of evidence of a boat. Just because no boat was found, doesn’t mean the Palean people didn’t once have a boat. Evidence of an ancient ship wreck, could be hiding somewhere in the village of Lithos, or perhaps it sunk to the bottom of the wide and deep Brim River. But the lack of evidence that something existed, does not necessarily mean it didn’t exist.
Third, and tied closely to the first two assumtions, is that the Paleans had to have brought the baskets to Lithos, but that might not be true. Maybe at some point another ancient tribe happened on a basket or two and took the baskets with them on their travels and ended up in Lithos. Perhaps the travelers weren’t ancient. If these baskets were found recently, then it’s very possible that tourests, or those working on boats on the river might have taken a basket in Palea and left it in Lithos. Just because an artifict is found and believed to be native to one area, and is then found in another, doesn’t mean that object wasn’t once exclusive to that area.
A basket is a potentially small and light artifact. Perhaps if a pyramid was found in one area, and the very same style of pyramid was found in a nother area, it could be argued that said pyramid wasn’t made exclusively by one tribe of people. Pyramids can’t be picked up and moved by nature, or a a person. Palean baskets on the other hand, could have a way of migrating to another area, while still exclusively originating in Palea.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Third, and tied closely to the first two assumtions, is that the Paleans had to have brought the baskets to Lithos, but that might not be true.
Error: assumtions Suggestion: assumptions
Sentence: If these baskets were found recently, then it's very possible that tourests, or those working on boats on the river might have taken a basket in Palea and left it in Lithos.
Error: tourests Suggestion: tourists
Sentence: Just because an artifict is found and believed to be native to one area, and is then found in another, doesn't mean that object wasn't once exclusive to that area.
Error: artifict Suggestion: artifice
Sentence: Perhaps if a pyramid was found in one area, and the very same style of pyramid was found in a nother area, it could be argued that said pyramid wasn't made exclusively by one tribe of people.
Error: nother Suggestion: No alternate word
samples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 579 350
No. of Characters: 2557 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.905 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.416 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.258 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.16 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.161 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.52 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.48 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 511, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...idn't cross the river, but perhaps some of the baskets did. A basket could have been l...
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Line 3, column 875, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
...will, and have travelled to other lands with out the hands of people. Second, it mus...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ecessarily mean it didn't exist. Third, and tied closely to the first two...
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Line 9, column 307, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: a
...;t be picked up and moved by nature, or a a person. Palean baskets on the other han...
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Line 9, column 307, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...;t be picked up and moved by nature, or a a person. Palean baskets on the other h...
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Line 9, column 307, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: a; a
...;t be picked up and moved by nature, or a a person. Palean baskets on the other han...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, third, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.6327345309 183% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 11.1786427146 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2711.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 569.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76449912127 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88402711743 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5096857723 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.376098418278 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 16.0 1.67365269461 956% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0919812677 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.44 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.76 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251131012231 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817258777243 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752098726764 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159435242481 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754920482707 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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