Arctic deer live on Islands in Canada's actic region. They search for food by moving over ice from Island to Island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plant on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the Islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warning trends that have caused the sea ice to melt. We can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age old migration pattern across the frozen sea.
Question: Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Canada's Island may well be the best place for Actic deers to live on, but the aurthor of this article make a number of unsubstantiated assumption consining the reduction in population of the deer's. Base on this assumptions, the author concluded that the declined in deer's population is as a result of the deer's not following their age group. It may fail to be the right reason or even have the perverse effect of worsening the research.
The author's first mistake is to assume that their habitat is limited to areas that are warm enough to sustain the plant for the deer to feed on is unsubstantiated. This is a classic case of confusing correlation to causation. Yes, deer's live on to search for food by moving over ice to ice during the year. It does not follow, that this was the reason that limited that habitat to warm areas, they may have other reason which may be as a result to search for for food. For instance, they may be moving out due to predators or running away from hunters in the region, or for any other reasons.
The claim that the reports from the local hunters, that the deer have reduced in population is unsupported. Yes, the deer may no longer be in the region or they have migrated to other areas. It does not follow that this is the reason to conclude that their population have declined. It may be for the resons mentioned above or for any other reasons that made them to migrate away from the region.
The conclusion that the decline in deer population is as a result of the deer's being unable to follow their age old migration pattern is unsupported. Yes, the deer's are no longer around. It does not follow that this is why their is reduction in their population. In fact, if the deer's have to follow the pattern of their age group, it may well be the main reason behind their disappearance.
Ironically, if the author of this article may be Correct in her assessment why their is a decline in the deer's population, it may faill to be the best reason or even have a worse or to destroy the effect of the research. Ultimatelly, the author is seeking the impossible-a quiet Island with much deers is now without deerks due to they are not following the age group pattern.
Despite the flaws in this author's argument, she may be right in her assessment for why their is a decline in deer population. She could stregthen her argument by providing its most important premise of data. For instant, if she provided a survey result by herself and the group knowin and scrutinizing the deers during the year and to know the cause of their disappearance her argument would have been far more persuasive. We're this the case, here reason for the declination of the deers due to deer's unable to follow the pattern of their age group might be justified.
Sentence: Canada's Island may well be the best place for Actic deers to live on, but the aurthor of this article make a number of unsubstantiated assumption consining the reduction in population of the deer's. Base on this assumptions, the author concluded that the declined in deer's population is as a result of the deer's not following their age group.
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Sentence: Yes, deer's live on to search for food by moving over ice to ice during the year.
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Sentence: It does not follow, that this was the reason that limited that habitat to warm areas, they may have other reason which may be as a result to search for for food.
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Sentence: It does not follow that this is why their is reduction in their population.
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Sentence: Ironically, if the author of this article may be Correct in her assessment why their is a decline in the deer's population, it may faill to be the best reason or even have a worse or to destroy the effect of the research.
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Sentence: Ultimatelly, the author is seeking the impossible-a quiet Island with much deers is now without deerks due to they are not following the age group pattern.
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Sentence: Despite the flaws in this author's argument, she may be right in her assessment for why their is a decline in deer population.
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Sentence: We're this the case, here reason for the declination of the deers due to deer's unable to follow the pattern of their age group might be justified.
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Sentence: Ironically, if the author of this article may be Correct in her assessment why their is a decline in the deer's population, it may faill to be the best reason or even have a worse or to destroy the effect of the research.
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Sentence: She could stregthen her argument by providing its most important premise of data.
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Sentence: For instant, if she provided a survey result by herself and the group knowin and scrutinizing the deers during the year and to know the cause of their disappearance her argument would have been far more persuasive.
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