The following appeared as a recommendation by a committee planning a ten-year budget for the city of Calatrava.
"The birthrate in our city is declining: in fact, last year's birthrate was only one-half that of five years ago. Thus the number of students enrolled in our public schools will soon decrease dramatically, and we can safely reduce the funds budgeted for education during the next decade. At the same time, we can reduce funding for athletic playing fields and other recreational facilities. As a result, we will have sufficient money to fund city facilities and programs used primarily by adults, since we can expect the adult population of the city to increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the given passage author has presented a planning of ten year budget for the city of Calatrava. The birthrate of that city is decreasing so the young population will be less than the previous generation. As a consequences the enrollment of the school and other sports activity will be lesser. So the planning committee has suggested that the budget allocation should be detoured from the education and sports to adult welfare and improving city facilities. While the argument of the author has some merit but required specific evidence to strengthen the conclusion.
Primarily the passage starts...
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Sentence: In addition it may possible that children of the other adjoining city may choose to enroll the school of the city.
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Sentence: In the both cases the prediction made by the planning committee will proved wrong.
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