For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. The symph

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For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. The symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. Given such developments, some city commissioners argue that the symphony can now be fully self-supporting, and they recommend that funding for the symphony be eliminated from next year's budget.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The argument has been rife with holes and assumptions in providing accurate data about increased funding and city commissioners argument that the Grandview Symphony would require increased funding.

The private contributions have been increased by 200 percent doesn't provide evidence that the symphony has to increase the ticket fare for the next year.There is no data to compare that the contributions have been increased to 200 percent.

Some city commissioners argue that Grandview Symphony can self-support its events because of increased funding.But this argument would be valid if the city commissioners who work for Grandview Symphony believe that their city doesn't require adequate funding.It is possible that other city commissioners who think that their city is not provided adequate funding would say that the Grandview Symphony can self-support their events inorder that their city would get adequate funding.

Attendance at the symphony's concerts have been doubled doesn't ensure that the ticket prices have to be increased for the next year because there climatic conditions may have favored this year and it doesn't ensure that the attendance would be increased next year.

The argument would be well reasoned if the data is provided about how many persons have contributed to the symphony last year and how many are willing to contribute next year.There should be a reference to compare the data that the private contributions have been increased b 200 percent.It would also be appropriate if the city commissioner of Grandview Symphony say that their city would not require funding and they can be self supporting.And attendance have been doubled last year doesn't ensure that the city would have the same attendance for the next year and due to this the funding has to be self-supported for Grandview symphony concerts.

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