All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
When educational institutions and teachers are deal with children and teaching them properly, it is usually recommended to involve parents to schools since parent participation can play favorable roles with children. However, the statement above asserting that it should be designed to make mandatory for all parents to work as volunteers overlooks the basic prerequisite for volunteering and negative consequences that might be shown among children.
When we first think of the original intention of this policy at schools, it is plausible to come up with several advantages. Parents, especially with jobs, can have a opportunity to care more about their children and to look around the educating environment and my children's classmates. This can be led to a sense of commitment to school environment and try to involve to provide services. Also parents can meet up with teachers and understand the recent issues among children and share those problems.
Nonetheless, the author neglects the virtue of volunteering work; it is based on personal willingness to participate. In spite of various advantages that taking part in works happening in children's schools, the work would become burdensome and onerous work deviated from original intention. Especially for working parents, it would be almost impossible to go volunteer work in daytime. For instance, when a working parent is required to participate in instructing lunchtime manners which indicates a parent should be arrived to school around noon, it is not plausible to run the volunteer work properly at all.
Second, imposing mandatory volunteer works to parents and inviting them to schools would result in detrimental consequences to some students under puberty periods, especially for underprivileged students. Calling for parents for student is a chance to show my parents to other peers and for a single-parent students, this would be a shameful occasion. Furthermore, if a teenager is under severe adolescent period, he/she would react sensitive to show their parents to classmates as well regardless of their parents' appearance or social status. Considering these possible cases, parents coming to volunteer at schools would only be harmful for students rather improving educational purposes.
In conclusion, requiring all parents to do volunteer work in their children's schools shows much counter-effects than benefits originally intended. Therefore it should be reconsidered to adopt the policy in schools thoroughly.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Need more arguments. Try to apply TLPE to the essay:
T: mean time. Maybe some parents are busy.
L: means location. Maybe parents' work places are far away from schools
P: mean people. Maybe some parents have criminal record.
E: means event. Maybe some parents' backgrounds like education, religion are not qualified to volunteer time to their children's schools. //your argument 3
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 380 350
No. of Characters: 2071 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.415 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.45 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.047 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 103 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.906 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended involving'.
Suggestion: recommended involving
...d teaching them properly, it is usually recommended to involve parents to schools since parent partici...
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Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...Parents, especially with jobs, can have a opportunity to care more about their ch...
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Line 3, column 391, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...and try to involve to provide services. Also parents can meet up with teachers and u...
^^^^
Line 9, column 148, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ects than benefits originally intended. Therefore it should be reconsidered to adopt the ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'nonetheless', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in spite of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244552058111 0.240241500013 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.179176755448 0.157235817809 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0726392251816 0.0880659088768 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0556900726392 0.0497285424764 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0387409200969 0.0444667217837 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118644067797 0.12292977631 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0629539951574 0.0406280797675 155% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.10750515687 2.79330140395 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0629539951574 0.030933414821 204% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00484261501211 0.0016655270985 291% => OK
Determiners: 0.0653753026634 0.0997080785238 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0338983050847 0.0249443105267 136% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0121065375303 0.0148568991511 81% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2498.0 2732.02544248 91% => OK
No of words: 379.0 452.878318584 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.59102902375 6.0361032391 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.448548812665 0.366273622748 122% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.377308707124 0.280924506359 134% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.290237467018 0.200843997647 145% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.211081794195 0.132149295362 160% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10750515687 2.79330140395 111% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 219.290929204 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54617414248 0.48968727796 112% => OK
Word variations: 61.2100008697 55.4138127331 110% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6194690265 78% => OK
Sentence length: 23.6875 23.380412469 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0242208202 59.4972553346 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.125 141.124799967 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6875 23.380412469 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.875 0.674092028746 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 61.4183707124 51.4728631049 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.55752212389 1.64882698954 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.463634501033 0.391690518653 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.116848581341 0.123202303941 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0593731465761 0.077325440228 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.608142173192 0.547984918172 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0909863325205 0.149214159877 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200222931332 0.161403998019 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586697443094 0.0892212321368 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.310022047841 0.385218514788 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0695223997323 0.0692045440612 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312665206632 0.275328986314 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025069848104 0.0653680567796 38% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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