In the constantly developing society nowadays, people have so many opportunities to get approach and have connection to the world. Hence, the improvement of every sector and their governments is required in order to force national economy to grow. One of the most important factors to achieve that is human resources. By educating a qualified workforce, country can ensure a sustainable development compared to their nations of neighbors. The question is which direction the workforce should follow: being competitive or cooperative, especially those who work for government. This essay will show my points of view about this issue.
In terms of being cooperative, young people who are being trained to become leaders in the future can create an image of friendliness and being ready to work as a team when necessary. Teamwork can help boost productivity whatever the field is. For instance, large organizations in the world like the UN, WTO, WHO, etc. are the results of collaboration between so many nations for the only objective, which guarantees the benefits of their territories and citizens. In addition, industries can cooperate with each other, not only in the same industry but also crossed support between different ones can contribute a huge value to the society.
On the other hand, being competitive creates a sense of tension and unfriendliness yet it is a natural instinct appeared in every person to help them explore and realize other aspects of themself. Thanks to the comparisons individuals, to whom at the same level or same class, people will know where they are standing at and what the can do to be better in the future, or they will be elliminated by opponents. For me, this is a good thing to buff someone's strength in just a short period if we apply this instinct in positive way. In my major of Logistics, there is a term implying the pros of competition called "competitive advantages", which is an ideal for businesses to pursue so that customers will differentiate them to others by some specific characteristics they have. However, unhealthy competition can ruin a business and even the world. Imagine that leaders of a country trying to destroy the economy of another by conspiracy, unfavourable policies and enticing enermies can lead to the wars and conflicts around the globe.
In conclusion, I believe young people should be educated in both directions to own a comprehensive leadership skills serving their aims. But we also notice to support positive competition and avoid negative one for the sake of global evolution.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'someones'' or 'someone's'?
Suggestion: someones'; someone's
...s. For me, this is a good thing to buff someones strength in just a short period if we a...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12619047619 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07824179725 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580952380952 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8000141537 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.315789474 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1052631579 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23124305332 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580511893071 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424757781223 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131669970193 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287439857285 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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