"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Co-operation, the sense of belonging or the large-hearten feeling of helping others is the basis of any organization. Whether it be industry government, industry or any other organization. Competition in turn is the feeling of how can an individual grow better than the other which involves little jealousy and sarcasm.
Though healthy competition is necessary in Industrial or government sectors for efficient functioning but only in certain circumstances, where other individuals are competent enough or probably more skilled than you. But, when the individuals are great learners or even if you are, the best can be achieved with the co-operation rather than competition. I had heard one popular story in my school days which was the story of a poor and sick farmer having four sons. The sons used to neglect the farm and refuse to co-operate with each other to handle the farm. One day the poor farmer applied the strategy and gave all the sons a separate stick to break.
They couldn't break the stick separately as it was very difficult to break, but together the broke all the four sticks and learned a lesson of co-operation.Analogous is the functioning of any organization, industry or government. Co-operation achieves the best results and deliverables than competition.
As it is well said that "United we stand, Divided we fall", For efficient functioning in any organization or to acquire a leadership position in government, you must first co-operate with your workers or colleagues so that they can feel comfortable working with you.
Thus the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and healthy competition which does not involves jealousy and sarcasm.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...and healthy competition which does not involves jealousy and sarcasm.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'well']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238244514107 0.240241500013 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.141065830721 0.157235817809 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0940438871473 0.0880659088768 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0376175548589 0.0497285424764 76% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0501567398119 0.0444667217837 113% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115987460815 0.12292977631 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0219435736677 0.0406280797675 54% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.23454157729 2.79330140395 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0219435736677 0.030933414821 71% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.103448275862 0.0997080785238 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.012539184953 0.0249443105267 50% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0188087774295 0.0148568991511 127% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1803.0 2732.02544248 66% => OK
No of words: 290.0 452.878318584 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.21724137931 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.58838876751 90% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.355172413793 0.366273622748 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.289655172414 0.280924506359 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21724137931 0.200843997647 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.155172413793 0.132149295362 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23454157729 2.79330140395 116% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 219.290929204 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555172413793 0.48968727796 113% => OK
Word variations: 57.4167184967 55.4138127331 104% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6194690265 58% => OK
Sentence length: 24.1666666667 23.380412469 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7124229534 59.4972553346 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.25 141.124799967 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 23.380412469 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.583333333333 0.674092028746 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 53.132183908 51.4728631049 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.64383561644 1.64882698954 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.507795660511 0.391690518653 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138202486849 0.123202303941 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0929961636424 0.077325440228 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.640638787098 0.547984918172 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.21656259187 0.149214159877 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206781607356 0.161403998019 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130567536581 0.0892212321368 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.268282126507 0.385218514788 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.14968142209 0.0692045440612 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.330681059133 0.275328986314 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145974666645 0.0653680567796 223% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.4325221239 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88274336283 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 7.22455752212 42% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 6.0 13.5995575221 44% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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