The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.
The bar chart compares the amount of the top five mobile phones sold in the world over a period of four years
Overall, It is clear that the number of brands from Samsung was highest and become the best selling brand in 2013. By contrast, the figure for ZTE was the lowest, during the period show.
As can be seen that the number of Nokia was increased significantly to around 430 million in 2009. While the figure for mobile phones from Apple was decreased by only 25 million. . It was also noticeable that handsets from Samsung, LG, ZTE accounted for a very small proportion approximately around 50 million.
Turning to the remaining, The best-selling brand was Samsung in 2013, we can see that the market leader from Samsung with the figure selling with 450 million, whereas ZTE was rose constantly by 60 million. In addition, the number of brands from Nokia was fall to only 250 million over the whole four-period show.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the lowest, during the period show. As can be seen that the number of Nokia wa...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...Apple was decreased by only 25 million. . It was also noticeable that handsets fr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, whereas, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 14.8657303371 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 33.0505617978 21% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 58.6224719101 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 770.0 2235.4752809 34% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 162.0 442.535393258 37% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75308641975 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 4.55969084622 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44079274644 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 215.323595506 43% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574074074074 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 217.8 704.065955056 31% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.59117977528 82% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9629310184 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161987300568 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818033926323 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080103918843 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122189603313 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665415462256 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 48.8420337079 151% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 100.480337079 31% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.