Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
In our modern society many young people ask themselves whether to try to make their dreams come true or to emphasize on some practical and valuable aims. In mu personal opinion the truth is between of these two edge situations. Nevertheless, the steps towards dreams should prevail in people's lives.
First of all, the claim states that it is better to deepen in the real worthy goals. Although this statement is a valuable advice, the life without dreams would be not fascinating and exciting, but dull and boring. Of course, no one says that young people should do nothing but dream, it is quiet important not to fell out from the real world and the real problems. At the same time it does not mean that they have to forget about their dreams. For example, imagine a young person who likes to sing a lot and would like to be very famous professional singer. The right way to achieve that goal is to do something that will outstand him/her out of many singers. Nevertheless, staying at home and trying to write a good song and simultaneously having problems with money is not the best track to the dream. He/she should also be a little be materialistic and to earn money singing in bars or restaurants, even he/she does not enjoy this option. This is a kind of balance between the reality and the dreams. There are many examples of such artists as Lady Gaga, Grigoriy Leps and others who started their career from the beneath.
Secondly, many people would advise to stick to the real world problems and goals because young people's dreams are selfish. While it is possible that these dreams might be selfish, there is strong evidence that many people are altruistic and many of them would like to try to help others. There are a lot of instances of artists who are becoming free will ambassadors of the UN in order to solve the problems like poverty in Africa, expansion of HIV, regional war conflicts and etc and what is more important that they are really willing to do so. There are many celebrities who aim to adopt children from Africa like A. Jolie and who support women rights equality like E. Watson.
To conclude, there is no doubt that people should think about the worthy goals. However it does not mean to reject dreams, these both should be combined to make lives of people exciting and at the same time feasible in the sense of possibilities in achieving the dream goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...some practical and valuable aims. In mu personal opinion the truth is between of these two edge ...
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Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'sticking'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'advise' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: sticking
.... Secondly, many people would advise to stick to the real world problems and goals be...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 81, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...le should think about the worthy goals. However it does not mean to reject dreams, thes...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the sense of possibilities in achieving the dream goals.
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'kind of', 'no doubt', 'of course', 'first of all', 'what is more']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229299363057 0.240241500013 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.15923566879 0.157235817809 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.110403397028 0.0880659088768 125% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0382165605096 0.0497285424764 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0403397027601 0.0444667217837 91% => OK
Prepositions: 0.110403397028 0.12292977631 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0191082802548 0.0406280797675 47% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.45000115864 2.79330140395 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0488322717622 0.030933414821 158% => OK
Particles: 0.00212314225053 0.0016655270985 127% => OK
Determiners: 0.0828025477707 0.0997080785238 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0254777070064 0.0249443105267 102% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0148619957537 0.0148568991511 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2406.0 2732.02544248 88% => OK
No of words: 428.0 452.878318584 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6214953271 6.0361032391 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.301401869159 0.366273622748 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.203271028037 0.280924506359 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.123831775701 0.200843997647 62% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0677570093458 0.132149295362 51% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45000115864 2.79330140395 88% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 219.290929204 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523364485981 0.48968727796 107% => OK
Word variations: 59.6798817667 55.4138127331 108% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.5263157895 23.380412469 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2034554348 59.4972553346 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.631578947 141.124799967 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5263157895 23.380412469 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.894736842105 0.674092028746 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 42.8534185932 51.4728631049 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.50892857143 1.64882698954 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340255633458 0.391690518653 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.100213116883 0.123202303941 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0669527227453 0.077325440228 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.518302537922 0.547984918172 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.136230603505 0.149214159877 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147997189053 0.161403998019 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796309008576 0.0892212321368 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.402714438868 0.385218514788 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0855253969916 0.0692045440612 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268798680052 0.275328986314 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0223775549207 0.0653680567796 34% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 3.66592920354 191% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.