Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish
"The best in us is determined only when we are in state of giving the best". The famous saying implies that if we are doing things perfunctorily, we won't be able to give our best. Indeed, it is true.
People always suggest us to do things which is worthy or more likely to produce more result. In the course of this we forget what we like. Moreover this leads to frustration and the internal peace is not achieved.
The person who is dispassionate about a task is more likely not to produce a good result in it. Unless you are interested in something you cannot do it with full dedication. A task done with dedication is always a fruitful one. Consider a example of Indian cricket team captain M.S.Dhoni. In his childhood everybody told him to not to follow his dream of becoming cricketer. A chance for a average person, in a population of 1.3 billion, to become a cricketer was very less. As a result of society he was forced to do engineering and ultimately become a ticket collector at railway station. But he soon realized that his place is in field and not at train station. As a result of his tenacious nature he pursued his dream and today his is well known as one of the best captains of era.
Similar is the example of great author Mr. Chetan Bhagat. Chetan was forced into a engineering college by his parents. He was asked to either pursue engineering or leave the house as a matter of fact. Because of parental restrictions chetan joined the engineering college and also completed his MBA from one of the most prestigious colleges in country. He joined a bank and was getting a pretty good salary. But ultimately he was frustrated of it and decided to write a book. Today, he is the best seller of many novels that have published. If Mr. Bhagat would have left his dream of writing, he would have been too frustrated.
However, it cannot be said that everyone will find what they want to do in the rudimentary stages of life. Most of the people are confused about what they want to do in their life and they become liable to sheep effect. Sheep effect means doing something what everybody does. It is only after few years they realize that their interest lies somewhere else. The famous example would be Mr. Satya Nadela, CEO, Microsoft corporation. Mr. Nadela pursued his education is material science from a average Indian university. Only after completing his graduation he realized his interest was in MBA and not in material science. He completed his MBA from university of Wisconsin. Today he is the CEO of a multinational corporation. Thus, we cannot say that everybody knows what they want to do in life. Hence a sheep effect can sometimes neither be harmful nor useful.
As a result, it can be inferred that following ones goals in very necessary. The satisfaction in life is achieved only when you have gained peace. A job frustration is deleterious effect on ones life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Moreover,
... course of this we forget what we like. Moreover this leads to frustration and the inter...
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...ely not to produce a good result in it. Unless you are interested in something you can...
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...mple of Indian cricket team captain M.S.Dhoni. In his childhood everybody told him to...
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...eam of becoming cricketer. A chance for a average person, in a population of 1.3 ...
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...vels that have published. If Mr. Bhagat would have left his dream of writing, he would have bee...
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...ody knows what they want to do in life. Hence a sheep effect can sometimes neither be...
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...ant to do in life. Hence a sheep effect can sometimes neither be harmful nor useful. As a re...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'as for', 'as a matter of fact', 'as a result', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228621291449 0.240241500013 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.1815008726 0.157235817809 115% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0698080279232 0.0880659088768 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0610820244328 0.0497285424764 123% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0890052356021 0.0444667217837 200% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.115183246073 0.12292977631 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0401396160558 0.0406280797675 99% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67336444228 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0261780104712 0.030933414821 85% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0732984293194 0.0997080785238 74% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0157068062827 0.0249443105267 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0174520069808 0.0148568991511 117% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2904.0 2732.02544248 106% => OK
No of words: 516.0 452.878318584 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62790697674 6.0361032391 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.327519379845 0.366273622748 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.218992248062 0.280924506359 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.153100775194 0.200843997647 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.102713178295 0.132149295362 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67336444228 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 219.290929204 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482558139535 0.48968727796 99% => OK
Word variations: 56.6079949436 55.4138127331 102% => OK
How many sentences: 37.0 20.6194690265 179% => OK
Sentence length: 13.9459459459 23.380412469 60% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.8783159857 59.4972553346 42% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.4864864865 141.124799967 56% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.9459459459 23.380412469 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.351351351351 0.674092028746 52% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.21349557522 192% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 35.8451707521 51.4728631049 70% => OK
Elegance: 1.15789473684 1.64882698954 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107910317845 0.391690518653 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.112006468979 0.123202303941 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0848227425409 0.077325440228 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.407395624373 0.547984918172 74% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133746049541 0.149214159877 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0321418716879 0.161403998019 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376401483631 0.0892212321368 42% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.294079209144 0.385218514788 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0656622309055 0.0692045440612 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078496865091 0.275328986314 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401001217328 0.0653680567796 61% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.4325221239 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.30420353982 170% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88274336283 205% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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