Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
Today in the world the rate by which population is increasing is very high. Each and every person has a some kind of dream, like to become a rich businessman like Steve Jobs or to become a well known actor or musician, while some prefer to become a scholar in the field of science, arts or literature. These are all dreams that want to be achieved as most of us think when we are in our childhood or teenage.
In achieving these dreams all of them become selfish in one or another way.
The author's claim that instead of following your dreams one should first emphasize on picking up worthy goals which simply means to look for a field in which there is a better scope in the future to make it as a career and one can sustain or survive by earning more than enough for his or her living as well as fulfill the family needs economically. In supporting the claim, the author says that most of the people are inherently selfish supports the claim almost in many of the cases.
Suppose, if a person wants to become a successful businessman in order to earn more money and live a lavish and luxurious life and spend time with the family on world tour etc. then he is definitely trying to be selfish. But everyone cannot become a successful businessman or even if he becomes than he won't get time for his own personal life. So it won't be a worthy goal from a personal point of view.
Taking another example of a person being in his young age and aspiring to become a musician or start band. In this the person has to be very much selfish as he might not get support from his family members because of the field not being a worhthy option or it might not be a promising career option. For this reason he must face the hardships.
So most of the goals or dreams are selfish
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 142, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...band. In this the person has to be very much selfish as he might not get support fro...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'kind of', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.203966005666 0.240241500013 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.161473087819 0.157235817809 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0821529745042 0.0880659088768 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.056657223796 0.0497285424764 114% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0509915014164 0.0444667217837 115% => OK
Prepositions: 0.1388101983 0.12292977631 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0368271954674 0.0406280797675 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.32289218524 2.79330140395 83% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0311614730878 0.030933414821 101% => OK
Particles: 0.0028328611898 0.0016655270985 170% => OK
Determiners: 0.127478753541 0.0997080785238 128% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0169971671388 0.0249443105267 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.014164305949 0.0148568991511 95% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1774.0 2732.02544248 65% => OK
No of words: 334.0 452.878318584 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31137724551 6.0361032391 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.58838876751 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.278443113772 0.366273622748 76% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.155688622754 0.280924506359 55% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0928143712575 0.200843997647 46% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.059880239521 0.132149295362 45% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.32289218524 2.79330140395 83% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 219.290929204 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51497005988 0.48968727796 105% => OK
Word variations: 53.737771185 55.4138127331 97% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6194690265 68% => OK
Sentence length: 23.8571428571 23.380412469 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.6328528847 59.4972553346 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.714285714 141.124799967 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 23.380412469 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.785714285714 0.674092028746 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 39.4260051326 51.4728631049 77% => OK
Elegance: 1.41052631579 1.64882698954 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28584827111 0.391690518653 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107920338976 0.123202303941 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0627985369143 0.077325440228 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.606958531535 0.547984918172 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.234951313173 0.149214159877 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115707032126 0.161403998019 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650033421247 0.0892212321368 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.213430302263 0.385218514788 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0466170427518 0.0692045440612 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168665782313 0.275328986314 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728970138524 0.0653680567796 112% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.4325221239 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.5995575221 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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