Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated
The statement claims that governments should ensure enough financial support to their mega cities for them to survive. The author then justifies it with a reason that it is primarily in big cities that a country's major cultural traditions are preserved and generated. The statement does have some merits considering the cultural diversity any metro city offers but is laced with some flaws if not entirely specious.
Firstly, culture can be defined as arts, customs, ideals and social behavior of a group of people or society, and the transmission of these aspects from one generation to other is called as 'tradition'. Big cities around the world, e.g. Paris, London, Barcelona, etc., have a lot traditional buildings and architecture - Eiffel Tower, Tower of London, Libraries, Museums and so on. Preservation of these architectures needs financial resources and is essential to conserve the aesthetic part of the cultural heritage of a country. However, beyond this , the utility of financial aid in cultural preservation is limited.
Other aspects of cultural practices in their pristine form is better visible in rural areas. The demographics of a country is also essential in determining from where the cultural contribution to a nation is likely to come. For example, in India, 74% of the population lives in villages and are mostly agrarian. Government can only preserve these agricultural practices through better funding on farming and related activities. Similarly, there are myriad traditional professions in the villages and small cities, e.g. lock making, handicrafts, hand-made leather footwear, etc. needing financial assistance for their survival. Considering the limited resources any government has, a proportionate amount of finances must be diverted to these villages and their masses depending upon their population.
Major cities are also highly sensitive to modern technological advancements. For instance, multiplexes have taken over classical theater shows, fast-food restaurants have become an alternative to traditional cuisine, and so on. Any cosmopolitan has diverse groups of people from different parts of the country or even abroad, mostly to earn their living. While they may exhibit some essence of their cultural roots, those traditions are purer in the villages or small cities where they actually come from. For example, in India the traditional 'dhoti's (a piece of garment draped around the waist by men) and 'saree's (a garment draped around the body worn by women) get replaced by corporate attire in office spaces. In major cities, People are mostly engaged with daily struggles of their life and get little time to shift their attention to cultural issues. In metropolis, rather than funding for cultural protection, good financial support to other important factors like health, education, employment, etc. may relieve these diverse groups of any financial and social apprehensions. This in turn can help them focus on their cultural traditions. Moreover, other intangible aspects of a culture like literature, values, beliefs, customs, social behavior etc. are naturally inherited from one generation to the other and can only be protected through education and propagation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...traditions are preserved and generated. The statement does have some merits conside...
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..., etc., have a lot traditional buildings and architecture - Eiffel Tower, Tower o...
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...itage of a country. However, beyond this , the utility of financial aid in cultura...
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...e an alternative to traditional cuisine, and so on. Any cosmopolitan has diverse...
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...ent draped around the body worn by women get replaced by corporate attire in offi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, e.g., first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, then, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2725.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52738336714 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91549939474 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543610547667 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 864.0 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2025670822 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.72 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329083726132 0.243740707755 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861389209723 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713713236352 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210106213991 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735171516083 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.8420337079 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 100.480337079 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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