Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.Write a response in which you discuss the e

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Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.Write a response in which you discuss the e

It is popularly believed that governments ought to guarantee that their major cities receive the financial support those cities need in order to prosper because they are generate and preserve national traditions. Although I concur with the first part of the claim, I agree with the reason only partly due to the reasons which will be discussed below in details.

To begin with, central cities definitely ought to be supported financially because those megalopolises are source of enormous economic power of today's world. For instance, such cities as Moscow, New York and London embrace headquarters of many multinational corporations and firms which generate significant share of countries GDP, from this viewpoint it is reasonable to create decent infrastructure and conditions for those businesses. In other words, governments ought to spend money in order to make those megalopolises friendly and convenient for big and small businesses and thus reassure the economic growth of the state.

The second reason to support big cities is that those megalopolises attracts many tourists from all over the world, you may ask why I should care. The reason is that those cities represent the nation, the country and its government as well. In other words, great cities create image of the country in the international scale. And state’s image creates people’s attitude to the state and its actions as well. Consequently, by supporting financially big cities we promote the state and create positive image about it. Once again, you may be perplexed and ask why it is so important to create positive perception of a state. The answer is that appealing image not only attracts tourists and their money but also make the state more attractive for financial investment as well. Therefore, by creating positive image we attract money which is needed for economic prosperity.

The third reason is that megalopolises generate culture. Those cities are homes for tenths of millions of people who came from different places and countries have distinct background and perhaps belong to different cultures have to try to find common language which allows them to work and live together. To illustrate an idea we may take a look at Los Angeles. This great city gives a shelter to several millions of people. Those people came from other countries, continents, cities and rural areas as well. Consequently, a Russian migrant has to work with a local resident and with other people from other countries such as India, China, and Vietnam. Although they have different attitudes and even values, they have to concentrate on their similarities in order to be able to work together. This interaction, which otherwise will be impossible, creates cosmopolitan culture. In other words, great metropolises are melting pots where novel culture is created. Of course, some of us believe that culture is preserved in cities as well but unfortunately, the city's conditions have little room for preservation of obsolete mores and thus people ought to adapt or be outcast.

In conclusion, first of all major cities should be supported financially because those cities are economic engines of state, secondly, the metropolises may create appealing image of the country and thus attract investors and their money. Additionally to it, new culture is generated in the cities as well. Consequently, by financing those cities we guarantee our social and economic prosperity.

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their major cities receive the financial support those cities need in order to prosper because they are generate and preserve national traditions.
Description: 'they' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.

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The essay is not exactly right on the topic. Need at least two paragraphs to argue against the "Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."

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i did it again. Thank you for your feedback. Korolev who was the chief of Russian space program used to said that each failure gives more useful information than ten successful launches. So, supposedly my essy ought to become better soon.

Спасибо. Thank you.

I)May you give me an outline on this essay?
I mistakenly thought that I manage to develop the essay properly. The idea was to prove that financial support is important because major cities generate culture, attract money/investitions and ensure economic growth.
In previous essay about cities and culture it seems that main accent was on claim but there it is on reason.
I cannot get idea about how should I develop it.

II) what do you think about this plan.

1) I agree with the claim because cities are important for nation’s development, imagine the USA without Los Angeles, New York, Chicago and other major cities, it is disaster economic, political, cultural.
2) that cities cultivate new culture - melting pot etc.
3) that megalopolises do not protect old culture.
This scheme seems to be possible.

III) In other words, the claim plays insignificant role in this promprt but the reason is crucial and therefore I ought to discuss it. Perhaps, the whole essay sould be devoted to it.
Is my wild guess correct?

I hope to receive your answer, thank you.

Need to mention rural area and small cities in your outline.

like this:

1. major cities need to receive the financial support for so many reasons, because they are the center of politics, economy and culture in a nation. and protecting cultural traditions is only one of them.

2. However, it doesn't mean a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated in big cities. for example, global village. We see same culture from New York to Paris.

3. the financial support should go to rural area and small cities too.

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Need to consider the claim and the reason together. There is no fixed rule for focusing which part.