"College students-and people in general-prefer to follow directions rather than make their own decisions. Therefore, colleges should eliminate as many choices as possible in order to offer students clear direction."
It is human nature to follow what other people are pursuing and we are often influenced by the people around us. It is true that humans rely on others and tend to follow the same path due to many factors. One such would be to avoid risk as they don't know whats on the other side of the road. Humans take the help of other individuals or rely on older people to make a choice as they believe they are more experienced and have a better outlook on life. Taking colleges in to consideration, we see many students pursuing the same realm as one of their friends and they avoid making their own decision. However this is not always true. Everyone doesn't follow this pattern. Many people go to different realms on their own interest. Also, the role of a college should also be to encourage students to take up different fields rather than narrowing the scope of choices to be made. If the number of choices are cut down, then it would lead to only few options and again everyone seems to travel in the same path.
A child, when is an year old, takes the help of his parents to walk. Parents guide them and teach them how to walk, how to behave, how to talk. An infant cannot learn these without the help of his parents. The qualities required to live in this society are developed in the kids at a very small age with their parents assistance and at this age it is important for them to follow the path paved by their parents to develop as one would not know how to get up and move around. However, the child should try to walk and falling down is what makes him learn. This would help him know what would happen when he is trying to do a specific task. Thus gradually the ability to make own decision develops.
While a child depends on his parents to make choices, it is different in the field of higher studies. Colleges today offer various programs and yet all branches don't have the same number of students studying in it. The create a balance and to develop the growth in all realms, it is important for students to take different courses. These students education would play a great role is designing the society and future factors. For this purpose, the college has to encourage students and explain them the importance of each field and once students acquire the knowledge about a field they would like to pursue it if, it is their interest. College should also create a sense of independence and decision making power in individuals which would make them survive in the world. However, narrowing down the number of choices available would not help in the betterment of the society in any way. This would have adverse effects and the nation and many fields of study would become passive as there would be no students in the abeyance fields to do any further research.
However, the interest of the student should not be dismissed. Students have a freedom to make their own choice and can choose their field of interest rather than stick rightly to what the administrators want them to take up.
In conclusion, colleges should not cut down the options for students but rather encourage them to pursue studies in different fields. This would help achieve a great amount of success in every field possible and pave the path for development of the nation and society and help solve many problems in different fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...pursuing and we are often influenced by the people around us. It is true that humans rely on others ...
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Line 1, column 262, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...e to avoid risk as they don't know whats on the other side of the road. Humans t...
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Line 1, column 579, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m as one of their friends and they avoid making their own decision. However this ...
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Line 1, column 608, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... they avoid making their own decision. However this is not always true. Everyone doesn...
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Line 3, column 18, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...l in the same path. A child, when is an year old, takes the help of his parents...
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Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...to live in this society are developed in the kids at a very small age with their...
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...ed in the kids at a very small age with their parents assistance and at this age...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...hen he is trying to do a specific task. Thus gradually the ability to make own decis...
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Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...same number of students studying in it. The create a balance and to develop the growth in ...
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Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...udents to take different courses. These students education would play a great role is de...
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Line 5, column 535, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...xplain them the importance of each field and once students acquire the knowledge ...
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Line 5, column 759, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...wer in individuals which would make them survive in the world. However, narrowing...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... to do any further research. However, the interest of the student should not b...
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Line 7, column 78, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'freedom'.
Suggestion: freedom
... should not be dismissed. Students have a freedom to make their own choice and can choose...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'in conclusion', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.21493902439 0.240241500013 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.182926829268 0.157235817809 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0685975609756 0.0880659088768 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0442073170732 0.0497285424764 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0579268292683 0.0444667217837 130% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0990853658537 0.12292977631 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0274390243902 0.0406280797675 68% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.35697596243 2.79330140395 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0503048780488 0.030933414821 163% => OK
Particles: 0.0106707317073 0.0016655270985 641% => OK
Determiners: 0.105182926829 0.0997080785238 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.030487804878 0.0249443105267 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0167682926829 0.0148568991511 113% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3349.0 2732.02544248 123% => OK
No of words: 599.0 452.878318584 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59098497496 6.0361032391 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94716853372 4.58838876751 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.30550918197 0.366273622748 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.213689482471 0.280924506359 76% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.135225375626 0.200843997647 67% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0684474123539 0.132149295362 52% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35697596243 2.79330140395 84% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 219.290929204 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424040066778 0.48968727796 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.8028622479 55.4138127331 92% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6194690265 141% => OK
Sentence length: 20.6551724138 23.380412469 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9960849293 59.4972553346 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.482758621 141.124799967 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6551724138 23.380412469 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.413793103448 0.674092028746 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.21349557522 269% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 42.0241206609 51.4728631049 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.19786096257 1.64882698954 73% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313478567783 0.391690518653 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108892858197 0.123202303941 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0562040473217 0.077325440228 73% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.501035925479 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158528681549 0.149214159877 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122077482716 0.161403998019 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654442519548 0.0892212321368 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.397773892375 0.385218514788 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0999779046591 0.0692045440612 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226333360619 0.275328986314 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447695713759 0.0653680567796 68% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.4325221239 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 18.0 7.22455752212 249% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 3.66592920354 164% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 26.0 13.5995575221 191% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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