Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
The issue at hand suggests that the government must invest equally in both the military and the arts. On careful perusal of the topic, one would tend to agree with this, since the Arts play a pivotal role in society, and is one of the major things keeping our world sane. Without an adequate amount of art in our world, anarchy is inevitable.
In the days of World War I and II, the commoners did not have much motivation to keep working hard. The pinnacle of these motivations, was through the work released by artists, authors, and poets. These radical thinkers, were the ones who inspired and provided reason for the natives to believe that they stood a chance. They spread their own ideologies, and philosophies. Through these ideologies, they were able to create a change in the mindset of the people, and even cause the most unlikely of turnovers in battle, through their continued inspiration! This is clear indication that the governments must respect the arts and invest in them just as much as they invest in the military.
Although, when we look at it from a different stand-point, we realize that art is also a form of spreading peace and joy throughout a nation, in the form of film, writings, posters, etc. We've all heard the phrase, "A painting speaks a thousand words". Then we must allow these forms of art, to speak to the people, and spread peace. But this can be done, only if the governments agreed to invest more in the arts, and be a little less focused on the military. Otherwise, the only message being relayed to other nations would be, that our country is more focused on being ready for war, than promoting moral righteousness.
Lastly, the arts provides us with the medium to exercising our freedom of speech, and freedom of thought. It gives us the individuality that we seek. It allows us to dig deep within ourselves, and understand life's meaning. Isn't that what life's about? We focus so much on alertness against threats, that we forget the chaos being created on the inside. We must address these issues by voicing them. We do not necessarily have to voice them personally, but this can be done vicariously. There are plenty of talented artists, who can express the feelings of the people. But in order to enable this, we definitely must invest in arts as much as we do in military.
Looking at the world today though, we can agree, that International threats are always a possibility. Ignoring those threats would be irrational. So if we can't afford to invest equally in the arts and the military, we must make sure that the gap between their individual funding is closed!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, lastly, look, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2172.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 458.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7423580786 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60449508967 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539301310044 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.4869763281 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.88 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.32 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.48 5.21951772744 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257970121676 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625929264785 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857663573034 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137586360633 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574505687144 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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