Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Government investments are wisely distributed among various fields in a proportionate manner. The claim about investing in arts as much as in military does not appeal both empirically and logically. Government officials responsible for this monetary funding are professed and invest where it is more likely and beneficial. Any organization requires to know many factors which affect this investments.
Arts in any country is brought forth to enhance its beauty and serenity. It can bring the country an aesthetic sense and also help promoting other fields. Any country focusing more on these arts which may include its monuments, art galleries, religious places and other aspects related to it. These can augment tourism and fame of the country. These virtues are definitely crucial but not mandatory. Investments should be used where it has pivotal importance.
Is art more necessary than Military? Military sector is the right choice for investing more. Monetary as well as all other amenities must be given utter importance to these people. As they are the armor and safeguarding our country from every possible risk. They are the true brave people who dedicate their life for their country. Undoubtedly, we must provide a huge part to them, than to arts. Though, arts provides return in any form but these soldiers and military sector deserves more.
Military training schools which train the youth to become future defense people should be allocated a glut amount of investments. As, it will give an assurance of building a more peaceful country. They are ready to give up their lives in any circumstances. Therefore, they deserve investments in comparison to arts schools. The students in art schools or any art related institution would not be that beneficial.
However, to maintain all the art galleries or monuments, government must aid a few investments to them. But, the surplus should be devoted to military sector because of their forever utter importance.
To sum up, Art and Military both are crucial in one country. A balance is already maintained between the two by government. There is no need of more fiscal aids to Arts rather it can be granted to military sector. For better and prosperous tomorrow.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'as well as', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235 0.240241500013 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.145 0.157235817809 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.1 0.0880659088768 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.06 0.0497285424764 121% => OK
Pronouns: 0.05 0.0444667217837 112% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0825 0.12292977631 67% => OK
Participles: 0.04 0.0406280797675 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79248833735 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0375 0.030933414821 121% => OK
Particles: 0.005 0.0016655270985 300% => OK
Determiners: 0.0925 0.0997080785238 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.03 0.0249443105267 120% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.015 0.0148568991511 101% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2233.0 2732.02544248 82% => OK
No of words: 361.0 452.878318584 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.18559556787 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.58838876751 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.379501385042 0.366273622748 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.313019390582 0.280924506359 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.210526315789 0.200843997647 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135734072022 0.132149295362 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79248833735 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 219.290929204 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556786703601 0.48968727796 114% => OK
Word variations: 62.1200551384 55.4138127331 112% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6194690265 136% => OK
Sentence length: 12.8928571429 23.380412469 55% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.3410411654 59.4972553346 43% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.75 141.124799967 57% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.8928571429 23.380412469 55% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.357142857143 0.674092028746 53% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 44.194796201 51.4728631049 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.40196078431 1.64882698954 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317872270741 0.391690518653 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0785291427255 0.123202303941 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0664370556474 0.077325440228 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.427342219679 0.547984918172 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.116399417901 0.149214159877 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955239476629 0.161403998019 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086451617938 0.0892212321368 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.256166697181 0.385218514788 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0157930120642 0.0692045440612 23% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194639260125 0.275328986314 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764040869019 0.0653680567796 117% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88274336283 225% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.