Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline; students cannot be motivated by school or college alone.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Today is the age of independence, everyone have the equal chance to be independent in his life. The technology is booming, the communication is flourishing. We can do tasks, which were tedious in past in just a fraction of second these days. People are becoming self indulgent in their approach, appreciation is depreciating. However, nobody can deny the importance of college, school or any other similar institution in one's career. Although, personal discipline is very crucial for success but we can't ignore the contribution of such institutions.
Everyone wants to be the next Bill Gates, Mark Zuckerberg or Steve Jobs. If they can make it after dropping out from college, why can't I? . Nobody can ignore the wonders these people have done, but nobody talks about the people who did n't make it through. I don't want to be pessimistic about it, I want to be rational. Every person is different, some are born with inherit personal discipline, some require a little push. It doesn't mean we are not gifted enough, it's just, we are differently gifted.
Moreover, nobody talks about the people who are successful and were motivated by their respective institution. I think the idea of doing something by yourself exists from our birth. Children gets excited, when they do anything without any help from their parents. The romanticism related to the idea to be successful without any help is making it more popular.
Some qualities are irreplaceable, such as hard work, self discipline, but the role of school or college is also of prime importance. Every person is wired differently, they have different needs. Most of the people needs direction at some point of their life, if not always. School or colleges or even their parents can act as one, with the help of other qualities such as hard work and self discipline they can achieve their desired goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...wever, nobody can deny the importance of college, school or any other similar ins...
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...ool or any other similar institution in ones career. Although, personal discipline i...
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...line is very crucial for success but we cant ignore the contribution of such institu...
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...it after dropping out from college, why cant I? . Nobody can ignore the wonders thes...
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...he people who did nt make it through. I dont want to be pessimistic about it, I want...
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...cipline, some require a little push. It doesnt mean we are not gifted enough, its just...
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...ar. Some qualities are irreplaceable, such as hard work, self discipline, but ...
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...ion at some point of their life, if not always. School or colleges or even their paren...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 2235.4752809 69% => OK
No of words: 312.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96794871795 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78785071091 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576923076923 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4659687146 60.3974514979 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.5 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0978078735817 0.243740707755 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0275036536285 0.0831039109588 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280327766567 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0585141651935 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206100276313 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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