People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Human beings' behaviors are interesting in that they can either be spontaneous or driven by external forces. Which one outweighs the other? Some claim that people's behavior is largely determined by external forces, not of their own making. While it may be true that external forces can greatly shape our behaviors, from my point of view, either external forces or internal motivation are of equal importance and always take effort on human beings' behavior at the same time. The reasons are stated as follows.
The human being is a social animal that always obeys a particular social rule to determine their actions. This is a social norm that defines the human being what can be or cannot be done. To understand this norm, we need to look back to ancient times when individuals are vulnerable to the external environment. Therefore, it is much safer for individuals when they act collectively to deal with rigorous external circumstances so that human beings can increase their chances of survival. The one who breaks the rules, a kind of social norm, maybe exiled then perhaps demise when faces external environment alone. In modern society, chasing wealth, beauty, even prestige is the appearance of action obeying the social norms. It means human being's behavior is largely determined, to some extent, by external forces when they implement a kind of action that mostly interacts with other people and society.
That being said, I must point out that human beings' actions are always driven by their own decision due to human beings having a sense of independence and autonomy when they mature. People always choose to do according to their preferences and interests under the circumstances of least interaction with others. An appropriate example not very far to seek. For example, people can choose to spend their spare time rambling in the national park or enjoy an engaging film in the cinema or have leisure time to read at home. These types of decisions are not decided by external forces but rather driven by people's own making.
From the discussion above, it is clear that both external forces and internal forces are capable of determining human behavior, and most of the time we cannot disregard either's influence. But neither can we compare their importance. In my opinion, external forces and internal motivation are not isolated when impacting people's behavior. Since current society is not a simple environment, people always make decisions with careful consideration of following the social norms and individual volition. In this complex process, both external forces and internal motivation are dependent and interacted.
In conclusion, I disagree with the claim that people's behavior is largely determined by forces, not for their own making. Both external forces and internal forces play a vital role in making decisions. And most of the time, they are working together to forge peoples' behavior. Given the different mechanisms in which external and internal forces shape how we behave, the conclusion drawn from a hasty comparison would certainly be oversimplified.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
Human beings behaviors are interesting in that they can either be spontaneous ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...ortance and always take effort on human beings behavior at the same time. The reasons ...
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...me. The reasons are stated as follows. The human being is a social animal that ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...beying the social norms. It means human beings behavior is largely determined, to some...
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...teracts with other people and society. That being said, I must point out that h...
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Suggestion: of the least
...s and interests under the circumstances of least interaction with others. An appropriate...
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... rather driven by peoples own making. From the discussion above, it is clear t...
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...tivation are dependent and interacted. In conclusion, I disagree with the claim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2600.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 500.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68646682466 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 817.2 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.0823097252 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76923076923 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178359628535 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638456740528 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590310796113 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128114285428 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513574440834 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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