People's attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
What does affect people’s attitudes more? Is it their immediate situation or surroundings, or the society, in which they are living? On the surface, it seems like people interact more actively with the surroundings and be affected more by immediate situations. However, I believe that the whole social structure affect people’s attitudes more for the following reasons.
Of course, some may argue that the environment they are living in affects people significantly. It is not difficult to see people choose their side for topical issues and form their attitudes. Or, they change their minds by the people they often communicate with. As human beings perceive audio and visual signals through their sensory organs, those direct stimuli surely have strong impact on their decision-makings as well as forming attitudes on a certain issue. For example, people tend to have more clear view and opinion of the issues that are happening surrounding them and affecting them. It would not be strange if a girl in a small town where the majority of the citizens are white does not have any clear opinion about racial discrimination, to which the girl has never been exposed.
Nevertheless, I still believe that it is a whole social structure that provides a set of options individuals can choose. Although individuals think they make their own decisions based on the immediate situation they face and with their surroundings they care the most, the pool of choice, which is given to them is fundamentally provided from the big society they are living in. For example, one may form his or her attitude towards refugees. He or she may think the idea of refugees is made solely based on his or her rational idea. However, it is difficult to deny that the situation the whole society is facing with refugee issue cannot be ignored when considering the person’s opinion towards refugees. Depending on how the nation’s policy on refugee has been changed, how the nation’s leader has been projecting the refugees, and also how the media of the society has been reporting the issue, the individual must have been affected. Therefore, we cannot simply ignore the impact of the social structure.
Moreover, the impact of the whole society on an individual’s attitudes has been increasing as the importance of the media grows. In the current society, where a myriad of news and articles flows around the Internet, it is very difficult to say that one’s opinion is independent from the social trend. In addition, when we consider the government’s use of media to instill a certain attitude towards the issue that is critical to the country, it becomes more obvious that individuals’ attitudes are formed according to the social factors.
In conclusion, on the surface, people seem to form their attitudes based on the immediate situations through direct interaction with the surroundings. However, it is the society as a whole that has bigger impact on individuals, since it provides the foundation of the way people perceive the world.
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Essay evaluation report
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arguments: OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 498 350
No. of Characters: 2464 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.724 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.948 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.671 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.916 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ed according to the social factors. In conclusion, on the surface, people seem...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'well', 'as for', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'of course', 'as well as', 'on the whole']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220890410959 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.162671232877 0.157235817809 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0907534246575 0.0880659088768 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0462328767123 0.0497285424764 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0684931506849 0.0444667217837 154% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.107876712329 0.12292977631 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0547945205479 0.0406280797675 135% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.97561702927 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0171232876712 0.030933414821 55% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0993150684932 0.0997080785238 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.013698630137 0.0249443105267 55% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0256849315068 0.0148568991511 173% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3071.0 2732.02544248 112% => OK
No of words: 498.0 452.878318584 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16666666667 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377510040161 0.366273622748 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.281124497992 0.280924506359 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.204819277108 0.200843997647 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.140562248996 0.132149295362 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97561702927 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 219.290929204 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465863453815 0.48968727796 95% => OK
Word variations: 53.5406794527 55.4138127331 97% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.6363636364 23.380412469 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2385238204 59.4972553346 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.590909091 141.124799967 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6363636364 23.380412469 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.772727272727 0.674092028746 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 50.7488134356 51.4728631049 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.38271604938 1.64882698954 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430823380002 0.391690518653 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12439269614 0.123202303941 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0847453149236 0.077325440228 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.531616110285 0.547984918172 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171479716228 0.149214159877 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.183159442604 0.161403998019 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807174570574 0.0892212321368 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.485868718293 0.385218514788 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.108490816329 0.0692045440612 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335486943086 0.275328986314 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655535322819 0.0653680567796 100% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.4325221239 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88274336283 184% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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