Throughout the world, arts have never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although many people believe that the government should provide finance for the arts to guarantee they can burgeon and availability to all people, the issue as to whether it could make threats against the wholeness of the arts or not remains controversial. In my opinion, the government should not fund the arts because the disadvantages of this action far outweigh the advantages.
First, authorities should prioritize urgent social issues such as education, public health or infrastructure over the arts. Although art is a type of amusement but people could not enjoy it while they are living in poverty or experiencing severe health problems. Additionally, creating art is a process that might demand a loud investment such as ceiling painting in churches or sculpture using rare materials. Therefore, this is likely to result to budget deficiency especially to countries which are in tight budget.
Second, the principle of the arts is expressing opinions and ideas of the artists. Through their creations, people could understand their points of view about many aspects of life such as nature, culture, society and politics. If the government funds the arts, they could be likely to interfere and influence creators and their works. Therefore, the artwork would be biased in favor of the government. Suppose, for example, in World War II, Reich Minister of Propaganda of Germany Nazi Joseph Goebbels used many forms of arts like music or film to propagate Nazi ideology. As a result, it might negatively affect the integrity of the arts since they are used to reflecting worldview of artists independently from political influences.
Finally, government funding of the arts could lead to conflict of interest because the government might want to make benefit from the arts. Consequently, to serve financial purpose, many creators tend to produce works which is felicitous the requirement of customers. For instance, the film industry has witnessed a dramatic increase of many movies which are sequel or prequel of a previous movie, whereas there are only a few numbers of original films. This might cause a lack of creativity since art makers are put profit on top of the list. Therefore, art would become monotonous because the diversity of art genres is narrowed down.
In conclusion, taking all the above mentioned reasons, it is plausible that government should not support finance for the arts. This action not only affects government budget but also have a negative effect on the integrity of the arts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...d availability to all people, the issue as to whether it could make threats against the whole...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2199.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23571428571 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81381734077 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547619047619 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7234646212 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.95 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.21951772744 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349297287882 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971681661476 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753341950422 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1930177605 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.081643027118 0.0667264976115 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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