Sports stars and movies stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them.In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid , we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibilkity

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Sports stars and movies stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them.In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid , we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibilkity

Sports stars and movies stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them.In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid , we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility

The statement contends spots star and movie star earn millions of dollars that they are paid so they fulfill this societal responsibility. I concede that it's not them job to fulfill the societal responsibility because they earn millions of dollars.they are not government people and this is not them job because fulfill the societal responsibility is government job not any iconic stars.many people believe that it's film star are role models them for young people who look up them.In this essay, I will argue that societal responsibility it' s not sport star and film stars responsibility

firstly, there are many good reasons for if popular star take societal responsibility them own desition because if they take it they are popular so that they make many people to do that consund abot to do that and then they societal responsed them in moral way because they are very popular and people listen them.Like this :while many type of professional promote the nation and stars promote that advertise and they support to people use that and adherant people follo them.

The satatment that conserd that if they aurn thats why they give bake to the society and help them in responsibility that is not fair way to say that stars are because of them, sacrified and hardworking of that paret not people folloew , they not tell people to follow them that why it's not them responsibility to

in sum,I have argued if stars not want to do any kind of responsibility that not them job to do that they are very popular because they are do that for them if they not want to do that no one can forced to do that because they are earn millions of dollars. finally, I fundamentally agree with proposition that if they help the society but it's not to forced them to do .

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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'kind of']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.21546961326 0.240241500013 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.193370165746 0.157235817809 123% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0690607734807 0.0880659088768 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0552486187845 0.0497285424764 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.118784530387 0.0444667217837 267% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.135359116022 0.12292977631 110% => OK
Participles: 0.00828729281768 0.0406280797675 20% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.66670281672 2.79330140395 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0469613259669 0.030933414821 152% => OK
Particles: 0.00552486187845 0.0016655270985 332% => OK
Determiners: 0.0635359116022 0.0997080785238 64% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00828729281768 0.0249443105267 33% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0193370165746 0.0148568991511 130% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2050.0 2732.02544248 75% => OK
No of words: 352.0 452.878318584 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82386363636 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.28125 0.366273622748 77% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.204545454545 0.280924506359 73% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.119318181818 0.200843997647 59% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0710227272727 0.132149295362 54% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66670281672 2.79330140395 95% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 219.290929204 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.375 0.48968727796 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 37.9104535946 55.4138127331 68% => OK
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6194690265 19% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 88.0 23.380412469 376% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 303.180639224 59.4972553346 510% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 512.5 141.124799967 363% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 88.0 23.380412469 376% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.5 0.674092028746 371% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.21349557522 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 108.454545455 51.4728631049 211% => OK
Elegance: 0.977443609023 1.64882698954 59% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.594133939926 0.391690518653 152% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.532799396352 0.123202303941 432% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0726306367101 0.077325440228 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.88429307703 0.547984918172 161% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153444827542 0.149214159877 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.462405148589 0.161403998019 286% => Sentence topic similarity is too high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.219842531529 0.0892212321368 246% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.493905883683 0.385218514788 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0460338001175 0.0692045440612 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.476746246004 0.275328986314 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.245863415355 0.0653680567796 376% => Less connections among paragraphs

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.4325221239 29% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 7.22455752212 42% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 4.0 13.5995575221 29% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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