Sports stars & movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility." -Write a respons

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Sports stars & movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility." -
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing & supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position

The Author Says that in the issue Some people have role modal on his life as a sports stars and movie stars.These people are paid the million of doller for the showing it self looks like role modal.I generally did not agree to this statement assertion.

It's Begin with,Some youngster have role modal is Sports stars and movie stars So it will be pay the million of dollar for showing our self looks like him and it will be aim is look like a role modal of the on his life.I absolute disaggreement to this because people have not recognizeing to him this people are stars.It will not thing look like and showing our self to this so much repees are wasting but this money iare investing in society so we will be the fulfill the societh requirement.

They do not thick this money is very useful in the society.for examle Some Childrean are very poor so it will not going to school so if will help the this childrean for the money help is very helpful to this childrean.They not thick this childrean are the future of our century.If they are qulify and responsible so they will easily struggle in the future and he knoe the how to work in different area.

Secondly,This type of people only show of our self to the othe people I am very rich and looks like the superstar for waisting the many money.But Dont thick that Ths money if will donate some area so it will very helpfull to this people.For example Some old edge home are in our city so it will help to tham so this people are enjoying our life and praise foe me and my failmily.It will not this this people have more money requirement to the other area we will pay the only foe show off our self.

Thirdly,Rich people do not have value the rupees and doller because it will waste as a water in our life for showing to other. They don't this this money very helpfull to the different area like Old edge home,some government school childreen and some poor or hendicam people if they are not work and get money.So this money it very helpfull to this type of people.

Finaly,I conclude that some rich people are not the thinck which money they wil be wasteing it will be very helpful for other society members and people thos are very poor and they cannot be working in the city,So rich people have think about the the which area it will wasting the money it helpful the society or not.If they not helpful the socity so they cannot be waste the money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: These
... life as a sports stars and movie stars.These people are paid the million of doller f...
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...d the million of doller for the showing it self looks like role modal.I generally did n...
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...ok like a role modal of the on his life.I absolute disaggreement to this because ...
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...cognizeing to him this people are stars.It will not thing look like and showing ou...
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...childrean are the future of our century.If they are qulify and responsible so they...
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... life and praise foe me and my failmily.It will not this this people have more mon...
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...aise foe me and my failmily.It will not this this people have more money requirement to t...
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...ur life for showing to other. They dont this this money very helpfull to the different ar...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.254273504274 0.240241500013 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.162393162393 0.157235817809 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0576923076923 0.0880659088768 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0683760683761 0.0497285424764 137% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0854700854701 0.0444667217837 192% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.102564102564 0.12292977631 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0363247863248 0.0406280797675 89% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.22389369047 2.79330140395 80% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0299145299145 0.030933414821 97% => OK
Particles: 0.00213675213675 0.0016655270985 128% => OK
Determiners: 0.123931623932 0.0997080785238 124% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0363247863248 0.0249443105267 146% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00854700854701 0.0148568991511 58% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2409.0 2732.02544248 88% => OK
No of words: 447.0 452.878318584 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38926174497 6.0361032391 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.237136465324 0.366273622748 65% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.149888143177 0.280924506359 53% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0939597315436 0.200843997647 47% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0648769574944 0.132149295362 49% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.22389369047 2.79330140395 80% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 219.290929204 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.371364653244 0.48968727796 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 40.5705320346 55.4138127331 73% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6194690265 34% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 63.8571428571 23.380412469 273% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 129.721050799 59.4972553346 218% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 344.142857143 141.124799967 244% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 63.8571428571 23.380412469 273% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 0.674092028746 191% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 37.0 5.21349557522 710% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 78.8459571748 51.4728631049 153% => OK
Elegance: 1.24324324324 1.64882698954 75% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32890907208 0.391690518653 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.322352235752 0.123202303941 262% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.123610345679 0.077325440228 160% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.906149629689 0.547984918172 165% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.172872116094 0.149214159877 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.231173746079 0.161403998019 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641353908195 0.0892212321368 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.477054189446 0.385218514788 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0833653914112 0.0692045440612 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249690134046 0.275328986314 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569505305688 0.0653680567796 87% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.4325221239 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 7.0 13.5995575221 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.