Subject: “College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.”
I fundamentally disagree with statement that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.Because, as a student I beleive that choice of a field in college is the base of any student’s career and a student should choose a field in which he/she is interested and not by availability of jobs in the field.
Firstly, if a student selects a field just on the aspect of jobs in that field even if they are not passionate about it, then their college study will be onerous.For example,if a student who was interested computer and have a great knowledge about it, and selects another field due to high job availability, it will be hard for him/her to handle it.In college, students have to study on the field they have selected for 3 to 4 years, that’s why interest of the student should have a higher priority.
If after the college years, a student is not skillful and passionate in the field, any company won’t give jobs even there are so many jobs available.Even if the student is selected for job , he will be uncomfortable there. But if a graduate is firmly interested in the field, he/she will have a better chance to be selected for a job even the jobs are less.
And it is not guaranteed, that the field selected by the student will have same amount of job availability when he/she is graduated.Scenario can be changed with the change of technology and needs.For example, few years ago there was craze for mechanical engineering field in college students because of high job availability, but in last 3-4 years the job availability ratio in mechanical engineering is very low comparatively.
In sum, I believe that if a student is interested and passionate about a field, even if it has a low job availability comparatively, he/she must select that field instead of giving preference to high job availability field.Then only the student will be able to learn and succeed.In conclusion, students should choose the field wisely according to their interest rather than considering the factor of job availability.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ollege study will be onerous.For example,if a student who was interested computer a...
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...t will be hard for him/her to handle it.In college, students have to study on the ...
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...s even there are so many jobs available.Even if the student is selected for job , he...
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...with the change of technology and needs.For example, few years ago there was craze ...
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...udent will be able to learn and succeed.In conclusion, students should choose the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 356.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88483146067 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10412933904 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 215.323595506 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412921348315 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.2370786517 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 23.0359550562 256% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 126.564871377 60.3974514979 210% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 289.833333333 118.986275619 244% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.3333333333 23.4991977007 252% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 5.21951772744 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.511633444484 0.243740707755 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.322861337045 0.0831039109588 389% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.185805344635 0.0758088955206 245% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.358690310396 0.150359130593 239% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.181432047373 0.0667264976115 272% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.2 14.1392134831 221% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.59 48.8420337079 24% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.3 12.1743820225 216% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 100.480337079 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 11.8971910112 244% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.6 11.2143820225 228% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 11.7820224719 221% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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