To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
When trying to glean the most important characteristics of a society, or place, ie: the landscape, demographic, and architecture, one might think that studying the major cities in each region is the key to understanding the people and culture of that region. Alternatively, in most cases, the very opposite it true. Most major cities, because they are home to tourists, and people traveling for business, have become much more streemlined and homogoneous. Major cities, are not only trying to make any and all visitors compfortable, they are also trying to project an image that they want visiters to see. So in fact, it’s the smaller cities, the rural small towns, that are still steeped in tradition and culture that should be studied if one wants to truly understand the society that lives in that place.
Having grown up in Tucson, Arizona, this descrepsency became very clear. Although Tucson is a rather large city compared to other cities and towns in Arizona, it certainly has a lot more culture and authenticity, than it’s sister city and state capitial of Phoenix, Arizona. Phoenix, is a city that is trying to pretend that it is not part of the southwest, or even a city in a dessert, overall Phoenix is much greener, has a wealthier demographic, and is much more clean and modern than Tucson is.
If you take a drive through Phoenix, you will see, lush green lawns, a river full of water, trees, and flowers. Phoenix does not look like a desert city. The city has water pumped in from the Colorado and the Hover damn, that is used just to make the landscape more aestically pleasing. Phoenix looks like Southern Claifornia without the ocean. Tucson, looks a city, that was once and still is an old south western town. Most front yards are filled with dirt or gravel. There is very litter grass and are very little trees. Cactus are everywhere and grow everywere. It is hot and arid and dry and the landscape and the culture still reflect that. You will still see people working outside in large hats- or sombreros similar to those our neighbors to the south in mexico still wear. Tucson, and other cities in southern Tucson, Yuma, Tubac, and Bisby, are all full of dusty trails that lead out into an empty desert.
In Phoenix, not all, but the majority of the population is wealthy. In Phoenix, especially in a suburb called Scott’s Dale, beautiful expenisive cars, and large shopping malls with store such as Nordstroms can be found. In Tucson, there is a mix of classes. There are fancy houses and cars, next to neighborhoods with mobile homes and shacks. A lot of our shopping is still local. Down town and 4th avenue are filled with thrift stores and family owned businesses. Unlike Phoenix, Tucson does not present as an overly corpotate, rich society, and this is again reflected in the small towns and cities of Arizona. Most people live a middle to lower class life, and have modest houses and cars.
In Phoenix, there are intricate freeway systems, twisting and turning ans stacked up and over and under. In Tucson there is one freeway. In Phoenix there are large, modern, clean office buildings. Tucson, has some of these as well, but a lot of it is a beuatiful, ecleptic mix of converted ware houses and adobe buildings. There is color and art and graphiti all around, especially in down town Tucson. Everywhere can be seen evidence of a rich, hispanic influence and culture.
A society is not a refelection of it’s major cities. Most major cities are trying to produce an image, be homogoneous, be attractive to all who visit. The smaller towns and cities is where the culture and tradition is still alive, truly defining it’s society.
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...more clean and modern than Tucson is. If you take a drive through Phoenix, you...
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... store such as Nordstroms can be found. In Tucson, there is a mix of classes. Ther...
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... under. In Tucson there is one freeway. In Phoenix there are large, modern, clean ...
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...rich, hispanic influence and culture. A society is not a refelection of it&apo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, still, then, well, in fact, such as, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.5258426966 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 46.0 14.8657303371 309% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3074.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 635.0 442.535393258 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84094488189 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01988110783 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54390914597 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 310.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488188976378 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 954.9 704.065955056 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 13.0 1.77640449438 732% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.2370786517 178% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.0124545233 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3888888889 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6388888889 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.08333333333 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118361905642 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0279794600354 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039130192426 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0606779804227 0.150359130593 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510274298673 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.