The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.
The society’s development goes hand in hand with people’s casting doubts against the power. Not questioning will fail to address malpractice of authorities and resolve serious social issues.
Many times, people’s quality of life can be enhanced if people question authority. Ordinary people’s rightful reactions to wrongdoings of authorities are healthy; otherwise a society would become more susceptible to corruptions and injustice, leading to less security for people. In case of Sewol ferry incident, malpractice of the captain of the ship exacerbated the situation, which led to greater casualties. The captain ignored warning signals and gave wrong orders to the passengers, thus delaying the rescue project. Hearing that, galvanized citizens protested against the ship company and the government. In the end, the captain was incriminated, and the government apologized for poor organization of the rescue project. Citizens’ protests definitely helped in preventing future atrophies and showed people’s power nationwide; it enhanced the well-being of people by exerting rights and boosting national security.
Moreover, having little to no doubts towards people with power could be detrimental for the society’s well-being. Depending on the general environment of a society, citizens might be used to blindly accepting authorities’ decisions which could hamper development of the society. Take Qatar for example. It is a small, wealthy country in Middle East area with monarchy system. People’s economic well-being is fairly good, but the nation has numerous problems such as serious gender discrimination and hostility towards foreigners. Since it is not a democratic country, it is difficult for citizens to have doubts and act against the government for betterment. Therefore, the societal problems are not resolved and they are only getting worse as time goes by. This example clearly manifests that not questioning the government, or the authority can seriously harm the society’s well-being in that there is little room for reformation of the society.
All in all, ordinary people should question people with power in order to ameliorate society’s welfare. Healthy doubts and peacefully acting upon problems enhance security and quality of life. To do that, every individual in a society ought to strive to create a proper and safe social environment that allows questioning against the authority.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
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arguments: OK
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flaws:
For GRE issue essays, better to have three or four arguments, not two.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 2003 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.518 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.869 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.044 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.3 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.465 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.042 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 945, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... rights and boosting national security. Moreover, having little to no doubts tow...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'no doubt', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.295045045045 0.240241500013 123% => OK
Verbs: 0.13963963964 0.157235817809 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0855855855856 0.0880659088768 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.036036036036 0.0497285424764 72% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0112612612613 0.0444667217837 25% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.103603603604 0.12292977631 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0472972972973 0.0406280797675 116% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.23113604127 2.79330140395 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0292792792793 0.030933414821 95% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0878378378378 0.0997080785238 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0202702702703 0.0249443105267 81% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00675675675676 0.0148568991511 45% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2478.0 2732.02544248 91% => OK
No of words: 363.0 452.878318584 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.82644628099 6.0361032391 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.58838876751 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.493112947658 0.366273622748 135% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.393939393939 0.280924506359 140% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.292011019284 0.200843997647 145% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.198347107438 0.132149295362 150% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23113604127 2.79330140395 116% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 219.290929204 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575757575758 0.48968727796 118% => OK
Word variations: 65.8374125377 55.4138127331 119% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.15 23.380412469 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9742982158 59.4972553346 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.9 141.124799967 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.15 23.380412469 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 57.5439393939 51.4728631049 112% => OK
Elegance: 2.38554216867 1.64882698954 145% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383208165117 0.391690518653 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0859777540746 0.123202303941 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0700874604899 0.077325440228 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.471671888787 0.547984918172 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138720797166 0.149214159877 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13743598589 0.161403998019 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919544951881 0.0892212321368 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.388074990505 0.385218514788 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0854030035568 0.0692045440612 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247207104722 0.275328986314 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0986424879757 0.0653680567796 151% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.30420353982 151% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 3.66592920354 164% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Minimum three arguments wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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