Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Some people believe that juveniles should pursue long-term and realistic goals. However, others have the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries more weight. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
The first and most important reason is that the long-term goals can improve juveniles’ characters. In fact, if the teenager wants to reach these kinds of goals, he needs to make many efforts and have accurate plans for this. Sooner or later, he learns have manager his time and energy, discipline, more focus. In addition, he will learn to ignore someone who says that it is not possible. Moreover, he learns to accept constructive criticism and use them to strengthen his personality.
A further point we must consider is that juveniles can be more successful when they have realistic goals. Most juveniles have not correct understanding of their talents, and most act according their interested. In the most cases, they can not gain a striking achievement, because their goals were not base on the reality and their facilities. Nevertheless, if a goal base on our facilities and talents, we will be success. I think that a small example can give some light to this matter.
In contrast, it is difficult for juveniles have to make plans, and spend much time and energy to reach the long-terms goals. Indeed, they tend to have immediate aims, because they do not need to wait much time for gaining the goal. In addition, long time for reaching the goal can decrease the juveniles’ enthusiasm for make a effort, and also they usually have not enough knowledge to have the real goals. However, the immediate goal, which is base on their desire, stimulates them for increase attempt.
All above evidence supports this fact that the long-term and realistic aims build juveniles’ personality, and help them to being more successful. Of course, as an English proverb goes “a coin has two sides”; therefore, those who have the opposite view partially reasonable that it is difficult to reach the long-term goals. Nonetheless, its benefits outweigh dangerous.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to have'
Suggestion: to have
...ns for this. Sooner or later, he learns have manager his time and energy, discipline...
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Line 7, column 331, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...the juveniles' enthusiasm for make a effort, and also they usually have not ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216019417476 0.240241500013 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.148058252427 0.157235817809 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101941747573 0.0880659088768 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0606796116505 0.0497285424764 122% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0703883495146 0.0444667217837 158% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0800970873786 0.12292977631 65% => OK
Participles: 0.0121359223301 0.0406280797675 30% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.82567423209 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0315533980583 0.030933414821 102% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0800970873786 0.0997080785238 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0218446601942 0.0249443105267 88% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00970873786408 0.0148568991511 65% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2132.0 2732.02544248 78% => OK
No of words: 348.0 452.878318584 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.12643678161 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.347701149425 0.366273622748 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.281609195402 0.280924506359 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.209770114943 0.200843997647 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.149425287356 0.132149295362 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82567423209 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 219.290929204 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548850574713 0.48968727796 112% => OK
Word variations: 59.9657213934 55.4138127331 108% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.5714285714 23.380412469 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4577395647 59.4972553346 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.523809524 141.124799967 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 23.380412469 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.761904761905 0.674092028746 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 44.7323481117 51.4728631049 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.10434782609 1.64882698954 67% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342226577929 0.391690518653 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0956550947462 0.123202303941 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0963936972763 0.077325440228 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.483615146451 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145699338474 0.149214159877 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121207522642 0.161403998019 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730407260391 0.0892212321368 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.257235830852 0.385218514788 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0441300520082 0.0692045440612 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22401564311 0.275328986314 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548762121364 0.0653680567796 84% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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